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The Troubled Mind

Am I Alone?
Am I the only one who knows
how this feels?
I hope I am.
A hope beyond hope

that is deeply lyrical
And unsatisfying.
Like a taco, dry and salty.
A sea shore, a tall cliff by the roadside
would do

to throw oneself off.
How does it feel?
Tempting as it seems
i would rather drink and drown
my sorrows in cheep beer

dealt by the devil.
bloodshed, murder, spite
are all things friends find

Amusing
impacting like bullets of wood
they never think of the splinters they cause.
or the shifts, and the buckles of grinding madness
my mind suffers

from a chaos that writhes and scratches and burns;
all goodness and happiness and love.
Chaos is itself chaotic
Here one moment and gone in two
or three or nine or a million

hours lying awake in bed
Hot but cold, smiling but sorrowful.
The pains I cause people through my own existence.
Better to place it in an unreachable place
away from sparkling eyes, beautiful smiles and happy hearts

Of which to hurt them is an evil
Worthy of nought but Diablo.
Alas, my chosen path.
Alas, the hardest path.
Alas, the right path

Is the most unjustified one of all.

Am I Alone in my Strife?
Am I the Only one who knows how it is to love
through a twisted mind and blackened heart?
I hope I am.
A hope that is beyond all hope

All Oblivion.

Author notes

Oh, and hi to MadPrincess, and all known associates and all unknown ones to!

, seeming as it is my first proper poem, and i have finally admitted i like poetry?

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  • Darkened Seraph
    November 22, 2008

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    Very good Jordan (least i think it is) ignore mardle it does flow effectively in my mind, the imagery is also very strong, I like the idea behind this although sad and painful, you are not alone many on this site will relate to this, even those who are in relationships like me. a very good start to life in hell with mardle and also me mwhahaha. lol keep writing, I will try to read them as they come

    Seraph (your worst nightmare)

  • Poco Loco
    November 9, 2008
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    ooppsy..forgot to applause

  • Poco Loco
    November 9, 2008
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    Ha...u may have got comment vaginity over me but aviv got there first. In your face mardle
    lol...anyway...great write...has emotion, great imagery and i think it flows really well actually. yes content does scare me a little but i hope your sensible and not about to do anything stupid
    Great write and welcome to ap!
    xxx
    and mardle...who cares about spellling!!!!???


  • kelbornro
    November 9, 2008
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    Hehe yay i get comment vaginity hehe.....sway

    wow this is impressive, the wording is excellent and apart from a few spelling errors and some flow problems it is brill....

    The imagery is fantastic as is the way in which your poem presents itself. for a first timer this is a fantastic piece of work.

    keep writing your talented

    kelbornro


  • Springo
    November 9, 2008
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    Pretty Good

    This good stuff, but a little bit worrying.

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