Dark eyes spot the heart she hungers to own;
withered hands clasp dangerously around.
Exhausting her beauty and limitless grace
she waltzes inside his chest.
Cotton white to frightening black
sleepless nights devour her;
the eternal hail of unshared devotion.
She steps one last time to shattered existence,
tempo increases:
her heaven space threatens collapse.
Wizened silk: her only protector
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Author notes
Option 1
Picture Credit: http://zemotion.deviantart.com/art/Dark-Angel-698595
60 Words
I have wrote nothing in a while, so i hope this one is ok 
Anything to say? Feel free...
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt Anyone? by ylova.
655 points, ended November 10, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This was an excellent read, with imagery that seemed to dance on the page and a well thought out structure. It brought its meaning across to the audience so well, I think we can all walk away a little bit wiser having read this piece of work. It gives the audience a lot to think about. I hope you continue to post your work on this site because I think you have a gift for words and could possibly have a career writing stuff just like this! Bravo
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it's certianly experimental on the word play overall i felt a dark time inside your mind when love brought the pai
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First of all, I am glad one of the pictures in my contest has inspired you to write this lovely piece since you haven't written in a while an all. Let me tell you that is is more than okay. It was a very good take on the picture. And I enjoyed it very much. You had me from when I read the title. Haha. Great work. Thank you for entering and good luck
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Your words are a collage of wistful images. Seeking that which we may never find, a perfect love, one in which there is warmth and balance. I do love the last line, wizened silk leaving little protected, it's perfect to express how vulnerable we can be.
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Interesting write
This makes me feel as though a lady falls for a handsome guy only to find she is now his toy t abuse and bring down and she holds her ground until the last blow to her death yet her love is forever strong a love his eyes wouildnt allow him to except
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great closing line.
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Wow, Great job.
I love the word choice!
This is a stroung piece.
So much emotion is such a short poem!
Great work hun!
Keep it up!
I can't wait to read more.
Keep writeing! xD
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Katiee.
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Wow, you did a great job with the promt you used. I loved your imagery, it was magnificent! As you were reading it was like trying to find a deeper meaning to the words on the page.
This is a really great piece!
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Excellent take on the prompt, and great imagery and use of language. You seem not to have suffered from your sabbatical from writing!
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oh my...
i loved our word choice in this piece. the imagery was remarkable, mind you, and was wonderfully coherent
a very good write
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Great write has very deep meaning I like
Exhausting her beauty and limitless grace
she waltzes inside his chest.
good imagery and metaphor.
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