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The war beneath

Give me your innocent eyes
look deep into the depth of my soul
theres nothing left but a mere black shadow
as my golden light has been sold.
My wings they cut
my sentence is now lived in hell
slowly they are turning me into a hungry demon
and its your blood i can smell.
So fuckin sacrafice your soul to me
so i can feed from the taste of your pain
join with me as one we will melt
our blood will rule the same veins.
We will be born as one
to live off mankinds fear
we will manifest the world full of hate
as we bathe under their blood filled tears.
I will become the godess of darkness
once an angel who stained her wings
never will my soul return back to heaven
as my name is hate
and i will burn everything.

no ones ever red my words,is it ok?

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  • arafura gold member
    November 9, 2008

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    Well I have read them now! Good to see another aussie in here. Your poem is excellent. I look forward to reading more of your work.