Drifted sands wash ashore
empty in the crystals they shine;
like your eyes swim in alcohol
I'll never find you...
Author notes
Prompt- Mother
A contest entry
- meaning and emotion by Lavender Butterfly.
550 points, ended November 10, 2008, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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simply beautiful. the very last statement in this was perfection. i haven't read something this mind blowing in a while. very admirable piece.
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The harsh realities of this world couldn't possibly have been expressed better. Thank you for sharing your heart.
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this meditative for right comparison
the vast breakdown of specifics comes from the first two lines when a casual beach scene can get caught up in the currents... which so sadly does prepare the finer point how drinking scenes or acquiescence can seem so far from danger except when out of control and then involvement is all diluted. and you last line still needs it searchable. for it not to be a wasted vacation from family per se... with a drowning worry of "swims" as there's fog over words almost now
standardly poignant, congrats on first to finalists ~
called Carolyn -
This gave me goose bumps ~ a brilliant write!.. x
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i love it! mysterious.
peace to all ~flight
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