a fall from grace
stilled of heartbeat
placid immortality
cold in deathlike
hibernation
awaits
chrysalis resurrection
Author notes
Prompt : Winter
In a list
A contest entry
- QUICKIE: seasons [3/4] by etoile.
550 points, ended November 17, 2008, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful! Lovely penned piece. "placid immortality"- I love that.
Thanks for sharing this
KW~
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hi KW
thank you for stopping by to read my scribbles today and for leaving your kind thoughts behind, I truly appreciate it!
blessings, sandi
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wow
DEFTLY penned! congrats on a well deserved gold.
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Thank you for your kind thoughts and time spent viewing my scribbles, I truly appreciate it!
Have a blessed day! Sandi
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I chose at random
and discovered this gem.
The chill, the promise of resurrection---
the premise, so well presented.
Aesthete2000
M-C
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Hi MC
Thank you stopping by to read my scribbles, and for leaving your graceous thoughts behind, I truly appreciate it
Have a wonderful day!
Blessings, Sandi
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What a beautiful picture you paint. I love winter, and your words bring the season alive for me. Congratulations on the win.
Sam
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When reading
the words seem to take on an almost slow-paced pause and start. This to me gives feeling to the dynamics carefully described. Congrats on the gold. It is well deserved. Frans
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Thank you Frans, I truly appreciate your graceous thoughts on this scribble
I love to pen short verses, just to see if I can convey the most impact in as few words as possible. I'm so pleased the freezing effect came across. I should post the pic I used for inspiration
Thanks again! And I'm so honored you've added me to your favorites
Have a wonderful day, many blessings, Sandi
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You are good at these winter scenes...using them as symbols, as metaphors. It has just begun and I'm already waiting for that chrysalis resurrection!
"a fall from grace"
I like that, it is a unique way of expressing the seasonal change...also a great way to express my sister Kate's last few years...
No, I don't have a sister Kate.
Definitely Gold worthy.
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Thank you! I love nature, it's my favorite topic to write on, an overflow from my brush to canvas.
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this was an amazing piece. it was short but it captured winter in such an amazing way. i loved the imagery and the way this was written.
thanks for entering and goodluck
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This is so nice and a simple beauty in your words, dear friend. Great job!
~Sonja~
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