I look into your eyes
and I can feel your love
running all throughout my body
warming me through all extremities.
You hold me close
and I can hear your heartbeat
A lovely melody,
that I could listen to for days upon end.
You understand me
like no one else can,
because we've felt the pain
of unspoken disappointment.
I've only told you
a single secret.
One simple thing,
but that was the secret that
scarred me,
broke me,
changed me,
killed me,
revived me,
renewed me,
and shattered my innocence.
I trust you with my life,
even though you gave me no reason to,
except that you understood,
when it was impossible for anyone else to.
You were my only hope,
I saved you until the very end,
because I knew that you would change me,
..and indeed you did.
But now I look into your eyes
and I want to go deeper,
we can see through each other,
without seeing anything at all.
I now love you in that way,
of the unspoken heartache,
that you will never know,
because I could never tell you.
I've fallen for you,
like so many others before,
but unlike
any at all.
I let you in,
before you proved to me
you were trusting enough
to hold the key.
Now only you
hold the power to unlock my heart,
because I unknowingly gave myself to you,
I've given you my everything.
Author notes
I don't really..know what this is. I mean, there's reasoning behind every word of it, but I'm not sure it could really be considered a poem. It's certainly not the way I usually write, but I haven't written in a pretty long time. I really want some feedback on this, but not just for poetical structure or anything, but mainly on the content. I've been dealing with this sort of, internal war lately, and I don't know how much of it I can take, but I guess life will keep going on anyways. There's a few misleading stanzas, that may make this poem seem like it's about something it's not, but I'll leave it up to you to interpret nonetheless. I love writing, so hopefully I'll start writing some more, and things will get better than this.
Comments
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i honestly dont know what to write... im struggling with something that seems similar to this right now and i cant even describe it, let alone figure out how to fix it.
im glad you wrote this though.
it helped me. a little bit.
and every bit counts, cliche as that may sound.
thank you.
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This is beautiful and seems to speak of loving someone and letting them into your heart, but at the same time, being afraid because you have let them in so much. I like the way you have written this as it is much better than many of the standard love poems seen on here a lot.
"You hold me close
and I can hear your heartbeat
A lovely melody,
that I could listen to for days upon end." I especially love that stanza. Beautiful! Blessings, Patty
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