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Oh where has gone the verve of youthful deed,
Now saddened sounds of silence resonates,
Its cadence soft in rhythm abrogates,
Condemning me to grudgingly concede.
The skies once clear now darkly overcast,
While views beyond are blurred by welling pain,
Conjectures wide on how I may sustain,
Through lesser lively levels of contrast.
No wagers down on gambled dull extremes,
These simpler times look past where I had been.
Dim doors unlock to one who waits within,
No longer near where once devoted dreams.
As white lights lead to veiled red glows in sight,
Rich flames of verdant passions guide my write.
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Hallowed Sounds of Silence…
Wandika 11-9-2008
Author notes
Sonnet
A contest entry
- Illusionary Poetry by Amera.
2000 points, ended November 14, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is very well composed! I read it several times and love your take on the prompt. I love sonnets and you modified this one like a master. I would say it's a cross between an English and a Petrarchan sonnet. Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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Thank you
I appreciate your comments and the HM.
Jim
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I agree.
I agree with Pat that this is some of your very best poety Jim. You put a lot of thought into this poem and it worked.
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Yes Judy I did
I am in Vegas at the PBR finals. Marchi won the world championship last night a day early. Lots of spare time here. Too old for this place.
Jim
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a wonderful sonnet...I love the alliteration you carefully sprinkle throughout the lines. A very enjoyable read, well done.
Rory
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Thanks Rory
You might also appreciate the fact that I wrote it in Vegas at the PBR finals. Marchi won the world championship yesterday evening.
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I had planned on attending the finals this year, but then chose to go to Phoenix in Dec for some hockey, football and golf. Maybe next year. I also missed the Canadian Finals Rodeo for the first time in a long time. Too busy to do everything I want to do! lol
Hope you had fun in Vegas...are you going to make the NFR?
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Probably not
too much to do here on the ranch.
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Well done Jim!
I thought this was one of your best works as a sonnet. Sad, compelling,,quite moving to read. Fine work again!
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Thanks Pat
You are a considerate friend to read everything I write. I do appreciate your kindness.
Jim
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