At the seashore waves were crashing,
winds were blowing, foam was flashing,
Still the plovers held a rhythm,
dashing sprightly on thin legs.
Seagulls, testing skills for swooping,
grouped-right-up like soldiers trooping,
Sounding battle cries of whooping -
Native cry, resembling rage.
Then a stage of storm clouds speeding,
rushed like gangs of steeds stampeding
‘Crossed the skies, with dark ones leading,
followed fast by ties with more,
Next the war gods started sounding,
drums of rumbling, quite astounding,
Thor then struck his mighty hammer,
grounding flashes - Signs of war!
Lots of people, well alerted,
left their homes and towns deserted,
All that’s left has been subverted,
when that storm met walls and flirted
With their lives forevermore ...
© 2008 Joy A Burki-Watson
Author notes
The Butterfly Effect is a chaotic effect created by something seemingly insignificant, the phenomenon whereby a small change in one part of a complex system can have a large effect somewhere else!
My poem reflects on that small beating of butterfly wings which may have originated somewhere in Africa before the breeze carried on ...
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I did enjoy and certainly can relate to this. Have never thought of Katrina quite like the butterfly effect but it makes sense in a way. The aftermath of this storm certainly had a profound chaotic effect on many, many lives. I thank you for the read.
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I like where yout ook this. very nicely done.
Criss -
Now this is art upon the page,
a phrase, a line, a bit at a time
to comprehend the meaning,
to appreciate the care with words,
to build to great cescendo.
M-C
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Ages ago, I wrote a poem about the butterfly effect, well, sort of...my stuff is never really about anything.
It's outstanding, both for it's literal take and the possible metaphorical ones. There's skill in your words, this prose poem, I hope people take their time when they read it, see the effort you put in the language, and the process you describe. It's epic, turbulent, violent and beautiful...as storms are...both the literal and the symbolic kind.
I like prose...Prose poems befit you, write more please.
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An epic in the making...
This reminded me of those saga poems of old; a very clever and like previously stated: thought provoking piece... well done 'j' worthy of gold & more... 'd'(david)
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A thoroughly enjoyable and thought provoking poem Joy. Really sets the old brain into thinking...Excellent my friend...Hugs..mal
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Joy this was another brilliant piece. Beautiful beginning but a sad ending due to war. I enjoyed your visual imagery. Thanks again!
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