Grey,
Black,
Brown,
Yellow,
Red
Not one better than the other.
So why does humanity suppress
For the colour of his brother?
Unite to fight,
Unite to fight,
For the right
Of all…
To be free of Tyranny!
Grey jungle glooming,
On gorilla bones
Poaching killing majesty
For Greed alone.
Unite to fight,
Unite to fight,
For the right
Of all…
Black skin weeping
Africa’s son!
Spat on, beaten
Mandela alone
Unite to fight,
Unite to fight,
For the right
Of all…
Yellow
Fever from pollution
Toxic waste
People dying everywhere
While governments smile
Of profits
What a disgrace!
Unite to fight,
Unite to fight,
For the right
Of all…
Red
Blood on the
Land
That strangles our sister,
Brother, father, mother
With intolerance, prejudice and hate
Unite to fight,
Unite to fight,
For the right
Of all…
To be free of Tyranny.
Author notes
MysteriousStrangerX
A contest entry
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And so is the truth...
A wonderful write and I wish you all the best in the contest.
Kate
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It was jumpy- but I like it. It reminded me of certain beats to the songs I like- it moves and makes a statement in its movement. Its not smooth but thats what gets my attention. This is really well done. Good write!
I like it and good issues brought up.
WritingFree -
the end of the stanzas is a bit annoying and detracts some form the poem but besides that it was an original and interesting peice thank you for entering and good luck
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Very interesting. It flowed very well but was sort of a jumpy flow. Very difficult to explain and probably making me sound a bit insane but oh well. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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speaks the word of truth!!!
what can i say! this speaks to all and a very clear message at that, im so so passionate about this kind of subject and i think you have expressed yourself respectfully and without ranting, i lve it!!
every stanza speaks volumes and i cant even pick out a favorite as they are all worthy, well done
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this was amazing, i loved the imagery and the format was quality !
a great write
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Passionate
I enjoed the layout, allcreativity is good be it the words, layout or mechanics. I am a empathetic contrarian cynic when it comes to politics and social studies. There is not much left to say but to say it in a different or creative way. You have achieved the latter. It is not that I am void of politally critical thought it is that I know the answers as does everyone else. Does'nt it then become a battle of agenda driven persuasiveness and void of practical universitality. Thanks for the thoughts and words.
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the layout of the colours instantly draws the reader in, thought the repition was really powerful,
im a politics student so love to read pieces that prove that some people still care!
great write, keep up the good work!
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wow...amazing :-)
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I don't think this is a really deep poem (as a prior commenter had said, I'm not sure if me and them read the same poem), but I believe the simple message portrayed is atleast portrayed well with good flow and use of repetition. I know exactly what you are talking about the first read through, but that is not necessarily a bad thing. If this was your intention (a simple poem about the effects of racism on the world and the ability to unite with our fellow brothers and make a change,) then you do your job well. It was a good simple piece that I have enjoyed reading .
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This is really deep. It moved me so much. You have portrayed what many have tried over the years with a great descriptiveness and imagery. AN outstanding piece! Keep writing!
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wow. this is amazing
its really deep
and its a great message =]
your flow was really good =]
great write =]
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kool write
great message to the reader... thanx for sharing
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Hmmmmm
This is a very thought-provokignpoem. Ther are alot of strong messages and it's a poem I could read ove and over and still find new depth to. I liked the use of the colours, it helps to bring a realistic and consistent theme to the poem. An all-round great write, thanks for sharing!
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AMAZING!!!
I not only loved this piece, I am in total agreement with it's statement. The repetition gave it a kick and the rhythm and flow where flawless. Fantastic job. ~
Gypsy~
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wow another great write . amazing mesage here
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Hm...nice!
I hate discrimination of all kinds so this is appealed to me especially
Loved the repetition, didn't get annoying like some can, fit very well in fact.
You're very good with comparisons, with the colors and places of the people and I love what you did at the beginning with the flowing down of the words, love that style
<3
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This is fantastic.More people should feel the same way.All yo often these days color gets in the way of ones right to stand in unison together to fight for the right to be free.Great job on this.My hats off to you and this fine job of poetry.
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