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She Was A “10”



It was a ordinary day
at the beach.
Until… until…

There she was!
The most, the most...

extraordinary woman

I had ever seen.

Thunder crashed!
Waves parted!
Castles rose from
the sea!

Until… until…
The heat swelled to
my face;

as I realized
all eyes were on me
and the tremendous
tent in my trunks.


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Painting by, Jim Warren

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  • Pure Thought silver member
    November 24, 2008

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    NIce poem, love your sense of humor. That's why you alway...always lay on your stomache at the beach. LOL


  • ennovy silver member
    November 9, 2008

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    nice take on the picture...your poem hold's the attention of your readers....and it's very sensual.....thank you for entering our contest...Novy & Brazos

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    November 9, 2008

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    Haha Well this made me smile thanks for sharing good luck to you in the contest best wishes always. Be well


  • LadyDementia gold member
    November 9, 2008

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    LMAO love the ending, a tremendous tent Better than a minor mound...lol. A wicked write, will bring a smile to all who read.Good luck in the contest


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 8, 2008

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    LMAO... well... she'd be sure to get a rise out of any man.. and some of us women too hehe

    A nawty cheeky take on the picture!

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