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Bring Me Down

You see her smiling, 
And wish she'd frown.
It's plain to see that you
Want to bring her down.

She is the object
Of your anger and blame.
Think it gets to her?
Isn't that a shame?

You use so much energy
To make her unhappy.
But all that you do
Is make your own life crappy.

She lives how she wants.
She does what she chooses.
She drives you crazy.
You run on short fuses.

You see me smiling,
And wish I would frown.
Try as you may,
You cannot bring me down.

Just venting. May add more later.

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  • Victim Of Violence
    November 9, 2008

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    I loved the rhyming and flow of this.
    You use so much energy
    To make her unhappy.
    But all that you do
    Is make your own life crappy.

    I loved that bit.and the ending too. It just says it all. It was really good!