Who am i,
i don't even know who i am
that you should love me
and see right through me;
this shell of selfish pride
slowly crushing me inside
can you tell me what i am
and what i'm meant to be
so maybe sometime they could see?
I'm lost and confused
and don't know who i am
and wondering if they see it better than, me.
can this be changed?
maybe you could help me see
who i am and who i'm meant to be?
Is this all just worthless nothing
a confused mind that satan's set
something to trip me so i fall into his net?
But who am i,
i don't even know who i am
that you love me and you save me anyway.
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Written February 1st, 2004
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I sortof liked it, the flow was a little bumpy at times but nothing that can't be fixed, I love the idea behind the poem and saying how you don't know who you are, i think we all go threw it, I sure as heck no i am, and its fnny to me that people still love me and tell me how much of a wonderful person i am when some times i just totally hate who i am...sigh,well any way nice try if you work on the few bumpy parts i would bet this poem would me fantastic!well
God bless and keep the faith.
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i like the idea of it. i especially like-
i don't even know who i am
that you love me and you save me anyway.
^ i love that. it gives so much more life to it. to me thats what made it good. if you took that out, i wouldnt care for the rest of it, but it gives a feeling of connection. i like that. good work. -
I just wrote a poem about not knowing who I am. I liked yours better than mine. Very thought proviking.
~Acadia~
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Hope I spelled everything right. -
This was awesome Ash, and so true. Odd, when I asked God who I was and what I could do to make myself better, I ended up becoming a Christian. Amazing how much one little question can change a life. This was such a good poem, and like Magneto said (That's my new name for him) I like how you just pose the question and don't really finalize anything in it. Leaves stuff up to the reader to figure out, which is always a good thing. This would be a great song, too. Sheesh. I can just imagine...the Ashley Crowder band lol. Great write Ashinator. God bless -Saab
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Hey sis,
This is another good poem. Wow, I mean who doesn't stop and wonder who they are. I love the fact that you just pose the questions and leave it open for everyone to sit and think about it. If you really take the time to sit and think, it's easy to realize that God is everything and that he loves us and saves us though we deserve nothing. It's such an amazing thing and you seem to have shared that well.
Matt
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