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Hell-Bound Angel

Again today she faces attacks
Nobody knows what she's holdin' back
Wearin' the same facade she wore yesterday
She hides the bruises with forgiveness and grace

Her lover is the only reason for life
He doesn't see her pain as she struggles to fight
The only thing keepin' her family from home
She thinks they wish that she was never born

Through the wind and the rain
In his arms all alone
In a world that she can't rise above
There's no dream for her wings
He's the only one giving her love
Hell-bound Angel

There's no one there to see her cryin' in the night
Nobody's there to hear her plight
A damaged mind caught in the lies and hate
If you could see why she couldn't wait...

Through the wind and the rain
In his arms all alone
In a world that she can't rise above
There's no dream for her wings
He's the only one giving her love
Hell-bound Angel

Her lover stands in a shaded place
Holding the soul with the broken face
Down on his knees he lifts a polished rock
Healing the heart that all others forgot

Through the wind and the rain
In his arms all alone
And he is all that she could ever love
He's her dream for her wings
The only one in life that she can love
Hell-bound Angel

Author notes

I wrote this while Listening to Martina McBride's song Concrete Angel. It started off as depressive, talking about how no one is alive to love her, but as i wrote the song...I couldn't help but make it a love song about the only one i feel that does love me. Is it any good? I know there are places that don't fit the song perfectly, do you know how i can fix it while keeping the same meaning?

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • teddybare gold member
    February 1

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    beautiful sorrow

    such a great write i do that too many of my writes are due to hearing and being inspired by music
    i really liked this write

    teddybare


  • brokenangel78
    January 30
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    I thought this was just beautiful, lovely wording and full of meaning, excellent. xx


  • Heartbreaker Eyes
    November 8, 2008

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    I loved it Bry! Oh, this was seriously one of the most beautiful songs ever. This was my favorite part:
    Through the wind and the rain
    In his arms all alone
    In a world that she can't rise above
    There's no dreams for her wings
    He's the only one giving her love
    Hell-bound Angel
    Yay! It was amazing.