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Supposed to feel

I run my fingers down your face
and brush the tear from your cheek
I look into your eyes

[what are you thinking?]

your eyes close
fluttering
shut

[so soft, so gentle
like the echo of
butterfly wings]

the ghost of your breath
shallow, calm

I feel it, against my own face
and sigh


this is how
love
is supposed to feel

Author notes

aww :]
I don't do happy ones very well but I like this :]

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  • butterfly-ona-wheel
    November 9, 2008
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    beautiful. end of.


  • Learning2PaintYou
    November 8, 2008

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    Aww! This is really, really sweet. It shows that first love bliss and contentment. I love the simile, "like the echo of butterfly wings." I'm not sure what an echo of butterfly wings is supposed to feel like, but it sounds sweet and romantic. I like that you say you sigh and that's what love is supposed to feel like. It totally is! You just get swept over your feet and you're just so happy and you just sigh. Thank you for sharing. =]