(drumbeat) 0:08 Dazzling evening currents darkly accent fitful dreams…
0:23 Dancing, low clouds playing distant thunder rumbling beat
gray skies...
0:43 Empty, long this journey fractured troubled heart abates…
0:59 Headlands, creeping sunsets twirling breezes, branching rays…
swaying...
1:15 Rushing chilled streams churning swirling mountains deep inlaid…
1:31 Moonlit heavens leaping gibbous moon tossed glancing rain knife-edged rain…
1:51 Emerald droplets tumbling fissured footfalls, violent winds…
2:08 Forests, hollows rustling dreams change, chasing white-capped waves; furious waves…
2:27 Howls with our questions laid linger on high
rippling shadows fade murmuring guests
to reply in kind pitiless time, skimming rays...
echo wailing...
2:48 (choral bridge) (bell)
3:00 Passing, unsettled day rings of a life, moaning, far and failed tremulous riddles teasing, unsolved…
3:21 Rippling mountain trails, gold inlaid swirling streams boasts of moonlit heavens veiled, shaded, stately…
3:36 Whirlwinds whispering thoughts voices spiraling on scattered winds drowned in sleeping rains…
3:53 Jade tipped leaves spinning, conspiring miles idling, echoing birds shake our rain-chilled memories...
4:12 Glorious we danced, gifted, embracing! Doubts departing on the wind’s promises…
4:28 Lingering, soaring calmed as we embrace under this mountain lake's streaming rain…
4:48 Still, I lay, hills, hollows, glades memories clear, melodies celestially sweet… so sweet
still, I lay.
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Author notes
scene from "The Adventures of Kitty and Kite" ballet- during his second adventure, Sir Kitty sets up camp during a stormy night at mountain lake, and dreams of dancing with Princess Kite through the stormy rain...
Poems/Scores to the Music of Random Goldfish:
(in reverse chronological order)
Thinking of August- Now or Never http://allpoetry.com/poem/5893739
Thinking of August- Duo (piano and cello) http://allpoetry.com/poem/5660705
Thinking of August- Acoustic Grand Piano http://allpoetry.com/poem/5892115
Thinking of August- Electric http://allpoetry.com/poem/5435359
Sweet August Days to Come http://allpoetry.com/poem/5423787
Sometimes... Faces http://allpoetry.com/poem/4940637
The Moon Tonight- Christmas from Ireland http://allpoetry.com/poem/4895079
Then the Merry Fiddlers Came http://allpoetry.com/poem/4885481
'Round a Grand Carousel http://allpoetry.com/poem/4778751
Two Souls Rooted Deep Within http://allpoetry.com/poem/4776245
A Dream- Where the Water Sleeps http://allpoetry.com/poem/4756347
Lune Sings http://allpoetry.com/poem/4397931
Gas Pump Music Duel http://allpoetry.com/poem/3449548
Chained in Silver http://allpoetry.com/poem/3385242
A New Autumn Day http://allpoetry.com/poem/3308104
Merry Merry Wiccan Wiccan Friends http://allpoetry.com/poem/show/3293000
In this Wilderness a Love of Old http://allpoetry.com/poem/3244044
The Sable http://allpoetry.com/poem/3239364
Donkey Feathers http://allpoetry.com/poem/3238828
The Obsidian Tree http://allpoetry.com/poem/3059430
The Forest Altar http://allpoetry.com/poem/2648314
The Snowy Banks http://allpoetry.com/poem/2646132
(some scores modified by me)
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- * Random Goldfish • next in list
- Ballet and Dance • next in list
- Music - Poetry to Original Music - NeoClassical • next in list
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Oh wow, man... this made me feel like the most bad ass trippy hobbit that ever roamed the shire...
those jade tipped wings and the whirlwinds were my favorite parts.
Yes, lol, diggin' it.
(from the headbanging hobbit)
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lol Hobbit- well, the thing is actually trippier than that... would you believe it is part of the ballet, The Mini Epic Romantic Saga of Sir Kitty and Princess Kite? (complete with adventures, war, romance, and evil in abundance?) (with the war caused by the theft of the Royal Cheesy Stuffed Potato?)(among other things)(and of course, original music throughout)
well, enough about that... show us the fur on your feet...! -
lol, leaves.... not wings... I got a little carried away there.
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Such beautiful imagery!
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Such compelling imagery. It made my mind really get lost in the poem. Well done!
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the poem is good but i think that it still needs a bit of work
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thanks, you thought right...
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Really lovely
Your lyrics are smooth-soft and sweet. The melody sweeps you into waters where light shimmers and fades from blue into green. Well done...1:39.
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Trippy.
Some wonderful lyrical images here, but I got dumped a few time during the trip. "Glancing rain" clashed with "unyielding rain," and is that sequential or concurrent? Then I was enjoying "hollow rustlngs" in your forest and suddenly I'm riding on "white-capped waves," and (oh boy!) they are furious waves. But I was really stopped by "tremulous riddles." Riddles are raunchy, rowdy, naughty, evil, bawdy, etc., but hardly ever timid or fearful. Careful editing could improve almost any poem, this one included. It reminded me of some of the stuff I wrote on acid during the 60s.
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thanks I was experimenting with a new technique... now most readers would just let the words bounce off their foreheads lol but yes, for a deeper reader, a critical edit or two might not hurt...! (and I am an incessant tinkerer...)
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excellent~
What a beautiful poem
The imagery is exquisite..and love the background...
So many images running through my mind...
Wonderful...and impressive
Best of luck in the contest
This is a winner in my book
Do hope you come visit me as well
Hugs
Susan~~~
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you've been here almost seven years and I haven't thrown a tribute your way? WELL! Time to make amends... http://allpoetry.com/poem/4758855
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magnificent
Lovely background, adds beautiful dimensions to your work . Such a work, one with a generous depth and beauty of its own that moves its readers into a marvelous journey of absolute, TAKE ME THERE AGAIN.
fine job
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a load of great imagery painted in this piece...wow.
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God damnit, I pressed the back button in the middle of typing my comment! Now I have to start all over.
ANYWAY.
I think this is my favourite thing ever. The words painted an incredible picture in my mind. It was full of colour and natura. Uber cool, rock on. And of course the music is awesome...but I might have to add those slurs for you!
I got lost at 3 minutes and didn't pick up till much later...think I'll have to try this again... this piece is especially epic!
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You got lost? Well, I hope it was due to being carried away on grand imaginings... hold off on the slurs- if you wait long enough you might get paid for it... lol
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>_< Maybe!
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