hollow shape
ugly
scared
bleeding
so alone
so worthless
so unloved
I sold my heart
to the only bidder
he took my everything
leaving only
empty shell
useless tears
Author notes
Lost in Dreaming
option 1.)
--what i see, then an explination why i see i it that way.
♥ meg
A contest entry
- Perfect Imperfection by PI Vault.
900 points, ended December 20, 2008, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - To say goodbye by BleedingBlackTears.
600 points, ended December 3, 2008, 80 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
Comments
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Very genuine,the feelings. It' s vivid,and honest.
This poem shows that you dont need fancy,flowery words to make a good poem. Sometimes,it only takes few simple english words,and lots of emotion.
Nice job,megan! -
well done i love it.
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wow this is a great poem. I love the short bits of lines, it really makes one feel broken, just like it should. The last two lines really hit you hard, more like a punch in the gut then a stab. Oddly this is beautiful.
cassie
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omg....short sweet and to the point, this is so beautiful in a sick and twisted way. the way you see yourself, and what made you see yourself that way. the words that you chose were just so perfect.
thank you for entering and good luck
DM
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