The word had been sent and it traveled the wind
Cross the hot desert plains and the mountains and glens
Till it found it an ear that listened and heard
And the town was aghast at the sound of the word
Then upward it rose and onward it went
Till the winds had died down and its journey was spent
And it settled itself on the cool ocean floor
At the place where the word had been uttered before
In the guise of a dove it had come to the place
Where evil and good would run out their race
And the winds would take flight away from the shore
For the battle would rage with a thunderous roar
Then the dove flapped its wings and upward it flew
Cause the word that it brought was now ringing true
For over the hill on the crest in the east
Came the dark evil figure in the form of the beast
And the horse that he rode was as black as the sky
With fiery red eyes and a cold chilling cry
And its hooves beat like thunder across the far hill
And they heard the beast roar in a way that did chill
Then they heard the wind sigh and they saw the great light
And stillness and silence pervaded the night
And the beast on its mount stopped startled and cold
For it faced there before it the masters of old
Now there was no going forward and there was no going back
For the angels of god stood there barring his track
They were there to the left – they were there to the right
They were there in their numbers to take up the fight
With fire and flames the beast stood its ground
While the town folk looked on and the angels stood sound
And the skies split asunder with a flash that did awe
As the earth shook and groaned and rumbled some more
And up on its hinds did the beast mount rise
With rage in its whine and flames in its eyes
It pummeled the ground with hooves as of steel
Alas we all knew that its presents was real
And the angels of god stood there unmoved and unfeared
As the beast took its stance and the mount groaned and reared
There was no giving ground – there was no giving way
There was no backing down to the beast on that day
Then a silence recoiled through the dimness around
And a great earthly shudder swept up through the ground
And a deep drawling thunder rose up and so fast
And the earth rocked and cracked and splintered apart
In terror the mount turned in haste to take flight
As a great flash of fire lit up the dark night
And the sound of the bugle was heard from afar
And the devil froze there – every corner a bar
Fire and flames leapt from the earth in a swell
And dragged that beast back to the centre of hell
And the earth stilled and calmed – fearing no more
And the dove he returned to take rest on the shore
There was peace to be found on the shore the next day
And the dove flapped its wings and glided away
And calmness embodied the whole of the land
As God touched the earth with his gentle warm hands
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That was a good story, and as usual wel writen with hryme and flow. You are so good at this.
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Thank you. This was an oldie.
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wow! The struggle of good and evil was portrayed awesomely!!!The rhyme was superb... i am in awe of your piece!!!!
becca
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Thanks again! Did you know this is the second time you have read this piece? You are awesome without even realizing it! lol!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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GREAT JOB! It makes my poem "The Fight Of faithful And True" look like childsplay. its about the same thing as you speak of. Damn girl! I am left astounded, worldess, and just outright dumbfounded at your talant. Great job
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Thanks for your comments. The flight of faithful and true. I shall have a look at this, but i wouldn't say this made that look like childsplay. Every poem has its own centre and yours is no less than a genuine write of the spirit.
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the battle of good and evil was very wonderfully written. I really enjoyed your rhyming as I am a fan of rhyme thank you for sharing, blessings always ~Trisha~
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spell binding
I really enoyed your modern telling of revelations it was so comtempoary real and difinetely worth reading.
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EPIC!!
Wow, this actually was a bit of an Epic, hahaa, nicely done! Very exciting! A few grammatical errors, but those semantics in no way discredit the tale! What an awesome write! Well done!
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What a large story
I'm not a friend of rhyme. But I found myself rushing to the next line. You do have a fine talent -c
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Interesting write. I found it difficult to relate to because of the Christian imagery and concept of God. To me, the devil is not evil but more like a jester. Otherwise, I like the rhyming though in "And a great earthly shudder swept through the whole ground" the word whole breaks up the rhythm a bit. It creates a sudden stop whereas the rest of the poem has a smooth steady rhythm. Still, this has kept my interest till the very end and despite of my inability to relate, I found the stroy was still interesting to follow. Awesome piece of writing.
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Hi, and thank you for commenting on this piece. It was written so long ago, i don't know why i used this theme as i am by no means religious at all. I believe in something, but not God. I also changed whole and revised that line. Thank you for that. It was appreciated much indeed.
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medieval goodness!
Don't like the fact that God had be brought into it at the end, but other than that this is a really great read.
It has a lyrical quality, due to the rhythm and the content- I can imagine medieval Bard performing this. I think it is Bard... ah well, I am sure you know what I mean.
Or maybe something performed as a dumb show at the start of an Elizabethan play.
Anyhow, great work!
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Thank you so much. I too don't like using God either, but i could not think of another word that would fit with the flow. Your comments were appreciated.
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well it might be long, but it's freaking fantastic!
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What can one say about such an amazing piece. It is a write which takes hold of your thoughts and holds you till the outcome has been found. One thats shows the battle between what is right and wrong, and one showing that fear is beaten from within with love of powers far beyond any imagination. Simply brlliant, and needs spotlighting in my eyes.
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Brilliant
Again you have managed to enchant me with you poetry. This is a well-crafted write, an enjoyable read, and again the star of the story is a creature other than human. Good job
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This is a long read but well worth the time taken. For me it is a reminder that good things in life must be earned by those who wish them. Very well thought out and well presented for easy reading. Very thoughtful for us old guys with eyes not so good. Thank you for posting.
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once again, what a truley mind blowing piece! i tend to write on the darker side (as you know i have lived). but thisw piece enthralled me from the begining.
your rhyming was un surpassed! kudos on that. but the tale itself, is absolutely awesome! i loved this piece!!
becca
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Wow ! !
What a truly brilliant write this is. Excellent imagery used. I felt I was actually watching this mighty battle between good and evil
It held me from the first stanza to the last. Great work 
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Thanks, mate. I appreciate your comments. You make me feel so good when i read them. This was written many years ago in one of my darker times. Take care friend.
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