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Cancer Christine

Spread your legs.
It's just another.
Smile and moan.
Don't tell my mother.
She'll never forgive, and she'll sob away.
I blush and start to cover my face.
Pushing up, he begans to say:
"This is now, and we're forever"
I stop him then:
"please, don't bother"
Faking emotion, his heart I'll steal.
Stalking boys, they're my prey, my meal;
pounce, and attack, so surreal.

Author notes

Did heartless whore come across to anyone else? =P

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  • misterfish
    November 21, 2008

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    I would have liked something about murder...This insinuates a possible murder, but its more about sex, which isn't really my thing...Well written, I just don't think it belongs in this contest...sorry


  • Elenaliz
    November 16, 2008

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    i like what youve written about here.and i didint think heartless whore i thought messed up girl.i think this is really good all the way up untill the last line.for me it kinda left me hangin like i want more.but its still a well written peice.

  • MegsterAugust96
    November 15, 2008

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    Thank you for the comment on my poem!
    Although,they cant even match up to yours!
    Your a really good writer and keep it up!


  • dustytiger
    November 15, 2008

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    i can see that, or i can also see black widow as well for some reason, great write, best of luck in the contest


  • Innocent-Lies
    November 15, 2008
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    very nice. good write.


  • Random Goldfish gold member
    November 15, 2008

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    Well damn! The poem is quiet excellent, and the title makes me think more deeply I think. I saw the story in my mind, very nice.

    Thanks for entering.
    Síochán leat
    ~Mairéad~


  • Brown-Eyed-Wolf
    November 15, 2008

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    well written . . . it's one of those time's that you not only see the story in your mind, but also want to step into it . . . Where I want to step into it, You'll have to figure out for yourself ^_~ still, all hormones aside, really good job ^_^

  • tyjohn
    November 14, 2008

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    i love it when the role is honestly admitted and a female whose doing it.yet faking emotion you should be satisfied at leas

  • The Jigsaw Poet
    November 14, 2008

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    Hahaha heartless whore lolz that was funny

    Erm have I missed the point was this supposed to make me laugh??? Erm it was a really well written poem, I read it twice before I commented, just don't want to think I missed the point lol

    Keep writing, this is great

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