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I am afraid

 

                                                    

 

Five thousand miles
and a great psychic geography
lies between us
and yet we remain the same;
  unforgettable
    delicious
       hypnotic
          superior
             undressed
          or with our clothes on,

erotic us...

There come
in equal measure, deep
tormenting times -
memories of a sharp sexuality -
in this cocktail of nostalgia
which I pour out and sip,
and in it, bright and sparkling
there is you, vibrant
with arch cleverness
and a smouldering, quick wisdom

Memories cling
like the tentacles of some
deep-sea creature, or perhaps
it is just me -- sucking at visions
that should have drifted free long ago

How can others compete, when
you ghost the shores of my memory
and seed my dreams with your words...?

















I am afraid
İcrisstiena

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  • zt
    September 4

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    Even friendly an benign ghosts can haunt the living. It is that presence, just out of reach, that leaves one wanting and emotions roiling. I understand that feeling and think you captured it well in your words here. I think this is fabulous


  • lunarlunacy
    November 28, 2008

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    very well done, from open to close. The use of spacing to add emphasis was highly effective.

    "and seed my dreams with your words" - thats some powerful stuff there.


  • ratkos
    November 17, 2008

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    i loved this. it was unique and the theme was very profound. well thought out i might add.thank you so much for entering this in my contest.i thoroughly enjoyed it1


  • Everyones Dead
    November 12, 2008

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    Outstanding ending, that's always important. Memories are dangerous, often hard to escape. Good write.


  • stitched-heart
    November 9, 2008

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    this poem is easily one of my favorites. the imagery you convey with your words is just outstanding. in fact i am favoriting it right now so i can read it over and over again. i hope you don't mind while i stalk your author page and wait for more beautiful works from you.


  • Ryan79
    November 9, 2008
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    Great

    The poem is so beautiful with the emotions. Very nice.


  • Night Hope gold member
    November 8, 2008

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    "you ghost the shores of my memory
    and seed my dreams with your words"

    Ahhh...such clarity dances freely within these lines, such urging & yearning throughout the entirety of this wonderful piece, my dear Friend. Your talent never surprises me, but I remain constantly amazed, intrigued & inclined to follow your breadcrumbs...Good luck in the contest, Sweetie.

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