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the Joy of Today

I may be just a little guy, when I yell or cry
I have them all on their toes.
I have seen this done several times.
Sometimes I think how bad I am

It is nice to match the people,
With the voices I have heard.
Just to know how great they are.
Sometimes  I think of the joy I bring.

How they bath and dress me.
I feel I should be sparkling.
I like how they keep feeding me.
Sometimes I feel I am dreaming.

There sure are a lot of new days.
I never know what another one will bring.
All of the hugs and kisses I get each day.
Sometimes I wonder if I am some kind of game.

Well out I go to some place new.
A lot of people say, "How de do."
I think I like this life, it is grand.
I know I want to grown up, be a man one day.

 

Does she understand what I am saying?



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  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    November 22, 2008
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    This is pretty good, I like the idea of matching today with yesterday ( outside womb vs inside wom and quite honestly wished I had thought of that. If I might suggest though, you should check your spelling as some corrections could bring this piece to a much higher level. ( it really is a good piece and I think with those corrections you could take the gold)


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    November 20, 2008

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    this is just awesome! you have given a sweet voice to this little one and i simply adore it your words and that sweet picture match like heaven to earth...winner for sure


  • OldBear34 silver member
    November 8, 2008

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    Nice Response!

    You have caught the experience from the baby's view admirably. I think you have misspellings and/or typos in stanza three, lines two and three. Otherwise it's a great write.