Photo opportunities between now and then
tear at the door of this moving dream
yet all remains the same.
A desert gets blustery with speed addiction
and imagines its dunes to be walking gods.
Look at the hammer of God melting in supplication
at the feet of Ra.
Did you see the hammer melt in its effeminate way,
did you glory when it succumbed to the Abba tunes
ripping through its haze of ecstasy?
The road contracts with the pain of discovery.
What right has it got to show the way
when the music of life booms through it
when the music of life erodes its foundation?
God and Ra play in the glare of distraction.
All are one, just different aspects
of a road filled with photo ops and Abba dreams.
Author notes
The Long Road distracts Me.
A contest entry
- PROMPTS VIII - Round 1 of 2 - by Bear - by Arkbear.
400 points, ended November 8, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A very interesting look at the music industry. The addition of gods is really unique and it goes strangely well.
"The road contracts with the pain of discovery." is an excellent line indeed.
Very intriguing work- thanks for sharing!
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An excellent piece of creative and insightful writing here...imagery and symbolisms used so very well...iconic fifures things that give an instant sense of meaning to so many...this is wonderful poetry...PK...
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Thank you so much. It took me all of five minutes to write but I felt inspired. I am glad it touched you since I love it although I seemed to have missed the 60 word limit - sheesh I did not read all the rules.
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Hey there Tanzy!
You are either gonna hate me....or.....get really mad at yourself after I say this.......but.....you have ( 132 ) words
Word MAX is ( 60 )
http://javascript.internet.com/forms/word-count.html
This is one of the best writes.....I hope you find a contest where you can enter this as a PW....it deserves to be recognized.....I am sooo sorry my Friend
Thank you for taking the time to enter.....God bless you,
Bear ~
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You know what Bear, I completely spaced the 60 words rule! I do not hate you at all, I am stunned that I spaced that rule. I loves ya! Thanks though for giving me good feedback! Hugs!
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