today was a interesting day!
walking along with my companions in song
we spoke of many stories and longings
from a closed book that life now took
Before i tell you the sweet irony i wish to depict
let me tell you of how i think i no longer feel
the fear that once gripped me to be alone
and to fear the very perspective of alone
I no longer wish to feel the touch of anyone
the warmth of no soul calls to me
no voice stirrs me or brings me to worry
no image stirrs a desire in me
Not even the blood that gripped me to feel
the stinging pain of whats losts
does not change my demeanor
or bring a different beat to this heart
I long for a crushing pain to bring a tear
to this eye to at least know i'm alive but
for i wish to no aveal
Lost away in my own head
feeling alone despite the song around me
i was jarred outta my realm to one comment
made by a dear friend
"man you have grown you really have bettered yourself in the last year"
Ironic is it not?
fix my spelling!! please and any major grammer issues to
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You're growing!
OK...I see lots of places that need toning, spelling corrections & grammatical changes are needed. I'm & need to get to bed! I'm going to copy this into my Word Program & give it a once over tomorrow. I'm working on my editing skills & like doing this 'cause I've learned it improves my writing! Keep that writing desire active. 
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Extremely Ironic!!
You've bettered yourself by longing for emotion you don't seem to be able to feel.
Which is harsh...
Have you written about why you cannot feel? It's usually down to a specific incident that you do not want to face. (For fear of feeling too much!)
It makes you face yourself, but you become 'normal' again.
I hope you can find the strength!
(It's an incredible write whether true or not!)
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