dark clouds of smoke loom
over the fallen city
the flesh has been burned
and the smell of charred mortals
lingers in the air
beauty, a masquerade
bathed in blood
traded innocence for ashes
murderous scars
conceived by hatred
abhorrence gave birth to this bloodshed
illicit lips
are whispering
beauty, a masquerade
billows of annihilation
a perfect silhouette of madness
sing death to the cherub
in your haunting reverie
walk over the vile ruins
and bones of slaughtered children
slain in their mothers hands
where are the next transgressions
in this dispossessed darkness
tragedy hangs over the sky
beauty, a masquerade
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Written February 1st, 2004
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Maybe i should read it again. i didnt get half of what they were saying^^. I mean, i liked it, of course. It was very dark, but i'd like a different title...beauty, a masquerade is almost obvious. But i digress. You definately have a nice use of language and convey ur views well. I have a poem called The Mask...its not on AP but i tihnk ud like it.
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Sinister, overwhelming write, which voices clear evil. I had to look a lot of words up though, not that there's anything wrong with that, it just shows that use powerful words in your poems. True and dark. Well done!
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Very nice poem! I like it too. Its all very intricate, very kool write
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this could be so many places man and evil has plundered in the name of beautiful dreamers and just causes......it could be a city anywhere in the world that will fall next, such as baghdad did.....or Haiti lies divided...great stuff...but sad as well for humanity and the children...Artis
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Good scary write. You carefully draw a moody piece of struggle and evil in this, Virgin Blood.
Good particular images:
the flesh has been burned
and the smell of charred mortals
lingers in the air
Good atmospheric write.
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I don't see the power in it. Looks like a bunch of random sentences without ending punctuation. All kidding aside, (possibly) I'm glad I bought my veil of ugly cheap so I can ward off that nuisance known as beauty.
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perfect.
this is a very good poem.=0 i can't beleive this poem it is sooooo... so scary and thrilling and flowing and it shows what this whole world's darkness is all about. this is the kind of stuff that is banned from libraries it is that good!!! please keep writing i love this poem! this this this is what i think when i get mad this shows exactly why people should be kind to eack other and be respectful! i think that you should publish this i really do. you should be very happy. i can't beleive it this is a masterpeice. -
Wow! This was truly powerful in all it's darkness but with all it's truth! You use your vocaburly very well...you kow i've liked you all this time...and this poem is why!
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I put my hands together to say what I cannot truly express with words--you are awesome!!
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nice write. thanks for sharing.
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dictionary.com
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Enter CLAIRE URWIN, stage left ....
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hey that sounded so good im putting you on my list
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This is really good, it kind of reminds me of Vampire The Masquerade. I am not sure if that is because of the content, or just because of the title. At parts it seemed forced for a flow of words rather than content, I know certain words sound really rockin together, but you still did a great job. Anydoodle, good piece and thank you so much for sharing. Keep writing.
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macrabe on the first reading. insightful in the next. the human condition on the third. sure to find more the next time i read it. great write. love the paradoxed metaphores.
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Excellent depiction of death and destruction.
Smooth prose, well expressed.
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I love the imagery you use. I saw this poem portraying beautiful people, with such ugly, burning, horrible people beneath the beauty. Of which there are so many of in this world, unfortunately. You're right. Beauty is only a masquerade. Very well done!
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yeah no shit this is great.. a flawless poem..
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Great
This is a great poem very well written and I mean it I hope to read more of these poems well laters.
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This was wonderful. Really haunting, disturbing imagery, and articulated well enough to prevent it from being just another tacky, cliched satanic piece...
Painted the picture of social genocide marvelously... If a little worryingly...
Congratulations. Well done x
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great word selection to keep the piece dark. seems to have a sodom-esque tone to it, given some of the lines. "abhorrence gave birth to this bloodshed" and the like. very nicely done.
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This is brillant,deep and flows well-well done xx
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This was a very well written piece. I love the imagery and the words you use to paint each scene. Seems to be born of deep thought. Wonderful write.
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so deep..i like this..so inner deep thoughts...i could imagine inside my spirits..very deeply poem and wicked!
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goooood!!!
ewww! dark macarbe sad tragic.Not sure what where you are writing about somewhere current? Great imagery!
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