A shadow on an empty ground
A piece of memory to not be found
Cris cross lines of past and present
intertwine from rich to peasant
This is neither right or wrong
forgive or forget to be strong
Color fades to shades of gray
As I keep the time at bay
To sleep, to cry, to share, to laugh
the pain is my present, the present my past
A contest entry
- As you leave....Quickie by TwilightDazzles.
850 points, ended November 8, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Hello there. Just come across your work as you commented on a poem entered in my competition - I like to see new faces and poetry!
Well done with this write - I really like the last stanza - particularly the final line!
Heath
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Great write here
You have a great understanding of life and yes we must take the lead and make sure of what we do for often it can become a heavy losd to bare
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Amazing write so very well wrote, the rhyme flow was perfect and not forced it just flowed into a fantastic read.
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Terrific piece of poeticartistry my friend. I love the flow and imagery of your every word. The rhyme was well thought out and it all came together wonderfully. Congratulations on the win.
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Very well written, I like your contrast between words. Excellent job, thanks for entering and best wishes
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Wonderful
Very touching and well expressed. Best of luck in the contest.
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