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As You Leave

I won't tell you no more
just what I'm looking for
You're everything to me
why can't you just see
that this love will always be.

I won't let you see me frown
or see that I'm feeling down
I won't let you see me not believe
that my heart it did believe
all of this happens to me as you leave.

In a list

A contest entry

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  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 9, 2008

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    Congrads on the HM, this was once again a poem that in the short time of reading you poems has left me in awe, keep it flowing


  • bananasfoster42
    November 8, 2008
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    congrats on that HM!


  • TwilightDazzles
    November 8, 2008

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    What a marvelous take on the prompt. I kind of saw the picture in this way as well. There are so many different ways it can be seen. You did a wonderful job! Thank you for entering


  • daviscth silver member
    November 8, 2008

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    You did a great job writing for this contest prompt. I really like the imagery in your words. Good luck....