In a world that's ever changing
and where life is looking bleak
Where pain and anguish thrives,
in old, the young and weak.
Loneliness a constant companion
and there is no place to turn
No friends who stand beside you
or show genuine concern......
Let's show them some love.
Where the old survive on memories
and every day becomes the same
with no friendly hand to hold them
as they walk down memory lane
or the neighbour who lives beside you
but hardly knows that you exist
and should they die before tomorrow
how long would pass before they're missed......
They need to know some love.
The cardboard box upon the corner
that shelters the homeless man
who survives on scraps and morsels
that he finds where'er he can
or the begger who once a hero
who for his kin and country, fought
now lay forgotten and discarded
on a park bench so distraught........
We need to show them love.
The less fortunate ones around us
to all of whom, we are so blind
whose stories have not been perfect
and whose lives have been maligned
for the children who live in ghettos
and those who live outside the 'norm'
spare them a little compassion
to help their lives transform............
Let there be love.
Author notes
AnnD has read the rules 
A contest entry
- For only poets up for a challenge by PureRomance.
700 points, ended December 3, 2008, 27 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I'm not one to talk, but I agree with Leetoy in that the wording could have been better, but over all, the message was clear, and it was a touching (as well as relatable) read.
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It has a very good contents, it has substance but the wordings need a little more imprrovement. But it can still be considered as an A-Okay.
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It has a very good content, it has subtance but the wordings need a little more improvement. But is an A- Okay
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beautiful.. <3
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when everybody appears wrapped in selfishness and greed ,this is an eye-opener in the present world situation....and the images re-appear in the mind powerfully (although we are familiar with them) with the smooth flow of your words and rhyme and rhythm..
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wow!!! i really enjoyed ur poem, it take a not-so- talked about topic and spells it out beautifully
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Wonderful So True Aries
Your poem is just so wonderful this is sadly the world today as we live 'it' now. All so called World Leaders should read 'this' and understand really how the 'other' half truly live.Not in their mansions & palaces full of their selfish indulgences I would like to put this poem on the front page of every major newspaper .I love 'it'(wish I had written 'it'!!!!)
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this is awesome my favourite poetry of the month.. haha it has a lot of heart to it..
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This just deserves claps.. so true. Now if only everyone would feel the same. Another touching and eloquent write.
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bvul poem let love embarce us all one day god
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Yes...Let there be Love...
A lovely lyrical...spiritual...heartfelt harmony with...a song filled with humanity....a melodic reminder for the human race...treat each Sister and Brother as if you...yourself...were in there place...smile at a stranger with loneliness etched on their face...share time with an elderly neighbour surviving on what they know is behind them and that which is to come...extend a hand to your fellow man...whether broken or wounded emotionally...we all matter within this great forrest and so does every single tree...the disabled with broken branches...the battered...shattered and confused...we may help them all to deal and heal by being a friend along the way...
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Excellent
Well written and so very true.
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Awww
What a very nice and touching piece... I just love this and the message in it... speaks very powerfully!
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Heart Warming
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Very nice flow and rhyme scheme And this poem has such an emotional "audience grabber" Nicely done for that.
I did notice one thing; In this stanza here:
or the neighbour who lives beside you
but hardly know that you exist
and should they die before tomorrow
how long would pass before they're missed......
Considering that neighbour is singular, the verb "know" should be "knows" ...
And in the words of yours truly; "Pick up the pen and never put it down again."
ASM
AKA Raymond
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100th hoodwink
I agree, there should be more love and acceptance in the world. Loneliness is a disease that is hard to win.
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Hood Winked!!
There is so much depth to these words. Sadly we do forget to give the love. So many times we are told of elderly who passed away and not just a few days or weeks but 3, 6, or in one case 2 years. How can these people not be missed if only we took time to show a little love. You strike a chord with this one and we as a society need to sit up and take notice of our neighbours. Could be anyone of us then wonder how we would feel. When a simple smile and g'day cost nothing but can make someone's day shine. Very nicely constructed. If we dont show some love just becomes white noise. Words to ponder and get up and do something like check on the neighour next door
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100th Hoodwink!
This is such an inspirational poem, and it covers many walks of life. Filled with deep emotional expression, wonderfully crafted, and a much enjoyable read...
Love & Light
Debbera
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100th Hoodwink!
An emotive and expressive poem that fills the pages with emotions. Lovely work.
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Your Poetry : Let there be love
Wow
Your words are very deep, they genuinely touch the heart . . . what more needs to be said it's perfect & you have the rhyme so right = ]
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great job!
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Beautiful
I loved the line "Loneliness a constant companion" because I have felt like that in basically the exact sme words, society is turning retarded these days and becoming apathetic towards love, which is way more important then having a job, going to school, beng patriotic, etc. and it absolutely SICKENS ME those who have no care for and laugh at the homeless. I have been thinking the same thing for quite a while and you took the words right outta my mouth, but if I were to try to write a poem like this I wouldnt be able to find the right words. Thank you for writing this. -
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by the way, I forgot to add applause, I would have given you three
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Wow... This was an amazing poem, so true. Made me think about a lot of stuff :]... Loved it, great emotion and words. This has so much meaning, I love it... xx
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This is really good, makes the reader think
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Beautiful thoughts expressing what we all should and need to do. I have always felt our purpose on this earth is to help one another and to make others feel their life is worth living. Follow the Golden Rule.
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Bravo
What all of us need to come to know and do the will of God for others in need, not to overlook what is really going on...just loved it all, blessings.
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that is so true every body needs love so spread that love people it begins with you.
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Very touching. This work flowed beautifully and created a window of understanding into your thoughtful spirit
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This is so inspirational. Your words hold power and really make you think
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i think this is a honest poem that holds a good message and i think some people need to take it to heart, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Yes! I am calling on behalf of the Queen...
For friends in far away places
it takes only one call
to express your feeling of kinship
that rises above it all.
though time and distance cleave us
though lives be sometimes dire
a little conversation
can lift us both much higher.
Loved this piece Ann- truly spoken and a lovely sentiment. It was great talking with you today... sleep well.
Peace
Terry
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2-sense
Shall I add my 2-sense into this??
...i dont care...i still am
2 words...
FRICKEN AWESOME XD!
best one yet!
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Oh so well done! its soo easy to tell when something is streeming from the heart, everything just melts together like a perfect recipy flow and meter fall into place and become the building block the message stands upon. And from this solid foundation can stand the message tall and what better message than this Let There Be Love
Paul Cyber Artist
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Bravo Ann! Wonderfully said and how very true. We tend to keep to ourselves too much these days.
An excellent piece
Thanks for sharing and all the best!
Gaylene
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Now this is what it's all about
bravo
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this is a great poem, the subject matter is so sad, and sadly true, what a powerful poem, best of luck in the contest
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Let there be love,
from one to another
showing this love
calling each other brother
Let there be peace
for every heart out there
where ever mankind is
let each live be spared
Let there be love
is all I have to say
let there be love
and let it begin today.
Dear Ann you have penned a wonderful poem there. I just added my two cents worth.
Riftkin
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Oh my Such a wonderfully woven poem. Good luck in the contest
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Outstanding
Such a thought provoking write, the vividness one sees in each stanza, the story presented in the entire poignant work . An in your face message.I cannot pick a favorite part, my mind wishes to keep the memory of it all ... well done
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This is a most excellent poem. I think everyone should read it and be reminded on these things. Often we get lost in our comfort zones and forget to look around us. There are those in need of love, compassion, a healping hand and yet no one there to lend it. Fantastic form and a very touching write. Awesome job here! Bravo!!!
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AnnD,
This is a beautiful piece. I agree with you. We often forget those who are out of sight... or choose to ignore those who are.. that might need someone to show them a kind gesture. This reminded me a a song called "We Shall Be Free".
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brilliant...
Let there be love...
what a very strong title, and one followed by the thoughts of all who show care in their hearts for all mankind. To show love to the needy, the lost and lonely, the ones who know no better through age or inability. When the world beats to the rythym of one drum, then peace will be shared throughout, and with love shared to one and all, life will be complete. A pure write of dedicated compassion from a heart that knows how to show it. Just Brilliant, well done you.
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wow!
WOW!! What a wonderful piece. I was a little thrown off from the one lines about love, but felt they needed to be in there. I love the line about the elderly surviving on their memories. That brought my heart to tears. This was such a poetic piece and very well written. Great rhyme scheme, it flowed so elloquiently, not forced at all. Wonderful write!!!
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Excellent
If only a poem such as this
Could be taken up as the Countries
Banner and State of Being...
Ifonlies begin with US.
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An amazing poem, we need more love in this world. This would be good to read to others outside of AP. I wish you the best of luck on your contest.
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It's a very heartfelt and truthful piece. I agree with everything you've said.
The people that are down and out need love the most and yet they get the least. Another scenario, where the rich get richer and the poor get poorer. -
It's very good. I couldn't have wrote a better one myself.
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Wow thats incredable Ms Ann. So very true as well. Incredably written. You should do great in the contest. Bravo.
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This is SO very true. The world has become cold and bitter so you don't really see real genuine love and when it happens you wonder what it is they want from you.
This touched my heart in a lot of ways and it can almost become like a song as well.
You've done outstanding Ann.
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This is such a wonderful and beautiful poem and so full of truth. You did a marvelous job with this title and the description and it's so very deep and everyone who reads this will know the beauty of the world and how love can change everything. You've gone beyond my expectations and I wasn't suspecting that. Marvelous job my fellow poet. Best of luck to you dear friend.
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