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Shadowed Past

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Putrid reflections show
a toxic soul torn in two
memories echoes from long ago
as sorrow drifts right through.  

Ravened heart stuck beyond
a past no longer treasured
grey sprinkles what was blond
the years have left you weathered.

Never lived in contentment
broken dreams died
decades twist with resentment
and the tears you cried.

 

 

 

Author notes

Option 2: Picture Credit: http://lady-symphonia.deviantart.com/art/Dark-Vanity-94338096

In 30-60 words (59)
Meh - just thoughts.

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  • Dark Otter
    November 14, 2008

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    Keep racking up the golds!

    They look good on your mantle. Rhyme so well done that it blends into the poem. Well done, poetess. The caliber of your work is excruciating consistently good.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 11, 2008
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    Woot... congrats on the Gold hunny


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    November 10, 2008

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    Oh hun
    This one hit me hard
    Brought me into her words of thoughts and feelings
    Awesome write and brilliantly penned Sis
    Julie xx


  • chilali
    November 10, 2008

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    Nicely done! Incredible rather! Haha. I really loved this. Your take on the prompt was just marvellous! The first stanza was aahh! You, have left me speechless after reading this poem. Haha. Cool background as well! Thank you for your entry and good luck


  • malmadre gold member
    November 9, 2008

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    Lady Dementia, your poem reaches out and grasps my heart, and I feel as if your words came from my unconscious. I love your rhyme, short but carrying such weight with despair woven through.


  • Sylvyrwyng gold member
    November 9, 2008
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    Good lord woman! how did you get into my soul so easily?


  • colie50
    November 9, 2008
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    Brilliant! I absolutely loved it. It's a very fitting poem for the picture.


  • aboomer silver member
    November 9, 2008

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    (lol - I just came from your 'happy meds' bg - NOW, the borders on this seem to be dancing!!!! )

    Love your wording, images and emotion in this!!
    best wishes in your contest.


    • LadyDementia gold member
      November 9, 2008
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      ..lol, sorry Thought I would try a sparkle effect, see if I could do it without losing the animation effects It worked, it is dancing


  • maralisa silver member
    November 9, 2008

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    a brilliant take on the promt your poem reflect such a deep sadness of raw emotions good luck in the contest maralisa


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    November 9, 2008

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    Impressive!!!

    Draws the reader in from the opening line & such was the depth of emotion, that the words hit me before the rhyme scheme... And what a wonderful rhyme scheme it was too, upon my second read, I was able to fully appreciate how cleverly crafted this wonderful piece is...
    You truly are the mistress of your craft... *bows in awe*
    Another fantastic & intense piece that didn't fail to invoke a reaction...
    Well done!!!


  • Maxboy gold member
    November 8, 2008

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    Very nice, you show the wounds that are much deeper than the ones reflected in the mirrors.

    Wonderful...Best wishes in the contest.


  • The Gambler
    November 8, 2008

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    Amazing how you tear right into the reader's mind with the opening lines:
    "Putrid reflections show
    a toxic soul torn in two"
    Wonderfully powered poetry.!

    P.


  • Canadamomma
    November 8, 2008
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    wonderful take on the prompt
    good luck in the contest


  • banrion
    November 8, 2008
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    this was a great take on the picture prompt. best of luck in the contest

  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 8, 2008

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    I bet a lot of people can relate to this!! Wow hunny.. very dark thoughts here.. the split soul, the lack of contentment and dreams dying.

    Very powerfully put!! Fabulous!




  • Learning2PaintYou
    November 8, 2008

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    I like your background. It's very unique and makes this poem stand out.

    I think you did very well with writing the words that this picture speaks. This write truly is brilliant. I think you chose your words very well, especially with "putrid reflections."

    Thank you for sharing. =]


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 8, 2008

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    this is honestly one of you best, but then with each one you only get better my friend, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest

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