I could shelter you from pain,
a protecter from shame
Bring you in from the rain
and take away your blame.
I will walk one step behind
so the radiance of you can shine
For you to see I'd become blind
as long as you'll be mine.
I can give my heart to you
and all that makes me "me"
A love that's real and true
that is what is to be.
Let me hold you for a while
until you forget what's wrong
I'll bring back to you your smile
and sing to you the sweetest song.
No longer living in sorrow
you'll always be more than a zero
I'll let you dream of our tomorrow
If you'd let me...I could be your hero.
Author notes
I don't really know what to put here, but you said it would be ok.
In a list
A contest entry
- Become your Hero for a day....... by AnnD.
2200 points, ended November 23, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite Heaven by Heavenly Angel.
700 points, ended March 27, 76 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please don't critique this.
Comments
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I like this. It’s strong. Please check your spelling of “protecter”. I think it ends in “or”. I’m not really fond of the third line from the bottom but I must admit, I can’t think of anything better that would fit into your rhyme scheme.
It’s good and feels like you mean it.
OOPS. I totally missed where you said I was not to critique the poem. My bad. Sorry.
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A">www...
This is just nothing short of sweet
Sounds like a song sung to a sweetheart and just causes one to smile
Thank you for sharing!
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So amazing baby....
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Thanks Sweetie. I'm glad you liked it. I could be your hero
Thanks for being my ap wife and a part of my life. You always make me feel happy.
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A most lovely poem, and what a 'hero' you portray in your poem. I really liked this. Thankyou so much for entering into the contest, good luck.
Ann
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Ah, if only we all had someone like this. Beautiful poem.
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I thought that this was powerful at one time I had the same feelings for someone good luck and love the rev papa
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I once wrote a poem about someone walking behind... but in my poem it was because that person wished to protect his love from all harm. I referred to death in one poem. You wrote a wonderful poem here. Thanks for adding it to our reading list and thanks for sharing it with us.
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Excellent!
Well, well well written. I had a soft touch to the words and they carried an abundant message of faithfulness and hope.
Well done.
I give you ...
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Beautifully Penned
These words just flow perfectly in my heart & mind just like a song. This read feels like a a song from your heart...Excellent lyric's & poem....your talent has no bounds...
novy
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i tip my hat to you on this one and just stand in praise for such a loving poem that offers so much, was this inspired by someoen, it was just golden, keep it flowing & good luck in the contest
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Wow, I love this one!
So sweet and heartfelt words that any woman
would love. It's great to read you again bro and
take care! All the best to you with this one in
this contest!
Jeremy0826 -
i realy like this poem.. I wish i had someone who would be my hero
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This is a very touching and romantic write I can relate to it. she is a lucky girl to have someone so devoted thanks for sharing this with us
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I can see your lady of choice will be blessed..such a romantic..all I can do is sigh... beautiful
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sweetly romantic...
beautiful...!
Smile♫
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Very romantic Pureromance! A very heartfelt poem that speaks from the heart.
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Great write, I love the flow of this poem. The passion and love within each line can be felt
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I am so glad you shared this with us.....stunning words pouring out of your soul ~
I felt each line as you penned it....I felt as though you were writing it to me personally.....and to do that, takes talent and wisdom ~
You have done well....I believe Ann is going to like this a lot
Good luck & God bless you,
Bear ~
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absolutely . . .
beautiful. Inspiring. I believe that anyone would be proud to be your hero. beautiful
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What an excellent piece!! It flowed so nicely and was full of emotion! Awesome job
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Wow
This I must say is one of your best. It is just simply there and tells what your trying to portray . Great work here. Lots of emotion and feeling here.
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Another great piece of writing.You spoke from deep inside and showed a part of you that is vulnerable.Sometimes that can be extreamly hard to do but in this poem you made it easy.Good luck in this contest you may just have the winner.
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Wow, just superb
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My dear this is beautiful, and anyone would be pleased to have you as their hero. For I know you have the kindess heart.
Riftkin
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Lovely sentiments...
Keep writing!
Best wishes
Lynda
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