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it is autumn time

When all  my hopes and desires
look with greenish sheen
I was  there  at my prime youth
swimming in , floating love streams

When they actually strive to embrace
all the fall colours in  good succession
I was alarmed by my  old age
cautioning me, to keep away from those  springing stakes
yelling that it is  an "autumn time " indeed!!!

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  • etoile
    November 17, 2008

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    good take on the prompt. this was nicely written and there were some good images in this piece.
    my favourite part is the first two lines in the second stanza.

    thanks for entering and goodluck