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in true sense-

The chill weather
that weaves straight into my body
never made me cool
when I  was in youth stream.

Now when the old age embraces me
with all the  dried features
chill weather stopped thrilling me
but to say in a word ,killing,me in true sense
putting a freeze on all my desires
and capping  on all my wants

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PROMPT: winter

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  • etoile
    November 17, 2008

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    i liked your take on the prompt, and the imagery was also very nice. i feel like this could be cleaned up a bit, grammatically, but otherwise it was well done.

    thanks for entering and goodluck