the keening wind
does not seek out
company.
cold pebbles
draw the water close
as a coat.
reflections
in the heart pool
stirring fitfully behind you,
felt but always
unseen.
fractal arms
criss-crossing interlocked
outstretched in serried waves to grasp at
the wispy silver trailing edge of
her lover's winter cloak,
out of reach.
Author notes
http://kil1k.deviantart.com/art/Forgotten-tree-46169645
A contest entry
- Winter Poetry by misticmoonlite.
575 points, ended November 13, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - picture prompt by transit.
690 points, ended December 4, 2008, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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I loved how you made this into a story which finally comes into focus towards the end.
The flow was good too and it was not too much yet added on details slowly until it was made into a beautiful piece.
This poem also allows for imagination and it can be interpreted in many ways.
good luck!!
transit~
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nice piece of freestyle poetry, the fallish weather gives a lot of imingery to the piece, thank you for this entry good luck
Linda
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Good take on the prompt ... the alliteration really gives this poem a nice flow. and a lot of good imagery used. this was really a great read. good luck in the contest
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I like the excessive use of imagery in this poem. It's packed with imagery. I love reading poems like this...Poems that allow me to relate to what's in the writer's mind. I can totally picture what you've written and place myself there. Thank you so much for sharing. Good luck in the contest!
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