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The Heart I Found In You

I was alone and perplexed when you found me,
hanging on to jagged edges of my soul,
barely breathing.

Roaming the crowded corridors of this world,
faking a smile.

The light you shone
burned deep.
It pierced my skin.

You approached me with angelic eyes
staring straight into my deserted mind.

You saw the affliction,
you saw the battle
between me, myself and I.

Right then,
you took my hand,
enclosed them in yours.

I felt the warmth
I felt a glimmer of hope

Your hand,
was like fire.

It burned my flesh
purifying my sins,
scorching the pain.

You looked at me and smiled,
told me not to worry.

I closed my eyes
and saw my past memories vanishing.

Visions of the future,
of happiness at last
snowflakes glistening on my window pane.

My heart flew before my eyes,
my soul was no longer broken.

Only then, did you place my hand
upon your chest
to listen to the music of your beats in rhythm.

"This is the music of a heart that has learned to let go"

...I hear the hooting of an owl
and I awake.

I set my hand upon my chest
and what I felt was bliss.

Yes, it was all but a dream,
although in reality, I now have in me
the purity and placidity of the heart I found in you.

Author notes

When I was given the title, I was confused at first as to what to write about. I wanted to ask for another title But this was challenge for me and I decided to stick with it. It's not good at all, haha and I am not thaaattt proud of it, hehe, but I was in a writer's block for a couple of days now and this is the first thing I wrote. I hope it is okay for this contest and the title I thank you for the good challenge!

AP Name - Ylova

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  • Nicada silver member
    December 11, 2008

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    Wow! A gorgeous write, and what a wonderful dream to wake up to! I say you did a mighty fine job on this poem, and you probably should not put your own writing down, ever. You are a very talented writer. Blessings, Patty


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    November 11, 2008

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    Oh honey
    I adored this poem
    Its flow, the feelings of being lost within one's self..
    and finding the love, the lover, the one who takes your hand, and shows you the inner beauty of you.
    Best wishes and love
    Julie x


  • PureRomance
    November 9, 2008

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    This poem is absolutely beautiful. You did a splendid job with this. Awesome job. The imagery and everything was perfect God bless you in all that you do and write and best of luck to you in the contest.


  • LionessK gold member
    November 9, 2008

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    Oh wow... are you daft woman? (just kidding obviously) What do you mean this is not good at all? You must be joking
    This is gorgeous Ylova. I love your wording... and everything behind the lines.


  • Alyzeh
    November 9, 2008

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    This is so beautiful Ylova. You know it reminded me of that song by Lifehouse in a few places, broken? I'm sure you've heard it. But ofcourse, nothing like that song, just in some places, I was reminded of the song. Great write and I agree with puppydog, it's so soothing, I think I'll run to bed now. Heehe


  • Puppydog gold member
    November 9, 2008

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    BEAUTIFUL!!!!

    So touching! Just makes me want to lie down, fall asleep and dream my sweet dreams.'s


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    November 9, 2008

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    this is an absolutely beautiful poem. one that just reaches inside and pulls hard at the heart. the emotions that I felt were intense. I was captivated with every word of this.. You may not like it, but its an awesome write. for someone who had a writers block one would never notice it by this poem.
    I loved your entire poem, this one line hit my hard
    "This is the music of a heart that has learned to let go"

    this is definitely worthy of a Gold.. I do think so..

    good luck
    kat


  • Lencio Rodrigues
    November 9, 2008

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    As of what i have read from you so far, this has been your best! did I say this before? ( dont want to be monotonous but yes, honestly speaking you have put a lot of brilliant images here, i like the crowded corridors of this world - that whole line. I would never be able to write anything with that title, unless i wrote something wierd and titled my poem with that but you have done the best job!

    Good luck, I see this winning!

    Love and light,
    Lencio


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 9, 2008

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    You see you are the kind of poet i have to tip my hat to amazing write and strong flow, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    November 9, 2008

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    I like these lines....Your hand,
    was like fire.


    It burned my flesh
    purifying my sins,
    scorching the pain....

    you did an awesome job with the title! I enjoyed this read. Good luck in the contest and i hope you overcome the block! lol....

    becca



  • MD Masroor
    November 9, 2008

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    .. I am anything but not impressed. This prompt would have made me kill myself. But you have somehow taken up the challenge and wrapped it around your finger and then played marionettes with them like from an old N-Sync video. Beautiful imagery, and a flawlessly serene flow or words from one line to the next made me read this again, something that I don't normally like doing, but for somehow enjoyed it this time. It kept me and hopefully the other readers in captivity while I and hopefully the other readers too tried to decipher the meaning instilled deep within this and the story behind it all.. Beautifully penned, and I mean it. Good luck!


  • Ken-Maverick
    November 9, 2008

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    Shaweeeeeeet
    Hey hey hey, i must say...
    this is my fav so far, and i loved the twist in the end too.
    Good luck in the contest

    Oh sorry about taking my time to return the favour,
    a few at a time should do the trick

    Ken

  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    November 8, 2008
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    i want to read it, ylova when you write it!

    becca


    • chilali
      November 9, 2008
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      I'll definitely let you know when it is done Becca If I can complete it on time that is Hehe. Writer's block!

  • MD Masroor
    November 8, 2008
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    Tell me when you're going to write it!

    • chilali
      November 9, 2008
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      I've already written it. It's done but not at all good!

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