Oh God
you have revealed me this and that
and your, this and that provoked me to be industrious
yet,I am not easygoing with
all your load of that and this
since they all are the falseness
they are the sugary picnic
while I prefer to have the illumination
which you obtained
so that I can be in the serenity
and in the relaxation
by reminiscing your surname
so please show me you,
you only and along all yourself in it
Oh God...
Author notes
I read this
Prabhudayal khattar
In a list
A contest entry
- For only poets up for a challenge by PureRomance.
700 points, ended December 3, 2008, 27 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wonderful. wonderful. wonderful.
i am amazed!
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Just Fabulous
Oh yes that pic with this poem is just great. I got a real chuckle out of it and I must say I so humbly related to this poem. I love your unique way of writing. I wish to learn to write it different ways then I already do. Maybe as I grow more in my writing and reading others poetry such as yours.
I love your love for God and the spiritual tone in your poetry. This is another beautiful prayer poem to me. Self contemplation of this or that...LOL
Best Wishes In The Contest!!
Wishing You Many Blessings
Much Love
Kelle Marie
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Blessings to you in light. A very spiritual write a soul prompt.
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Amen. Peace always and best wishes for this contest. Rhonda
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God showing Himself in the midst of the chaos of life...sometimes is hard...We want serenity...Your quest is ours that want to know HIM....Thanks for sharing....Our voices echo the same....Beautiful thoughts and write!
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its a interesting piece,first thoughts are that in our faith do we really need a sign? if we do we lack what little faith we possess, therefore i have reaccuringly been told, "have courage,Ye of little faith." and to not look for a sign for i don't need one, my belief is a sign in itself.
..just a thought.thank you for the moments you took too share.
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A very interesting write you have here for this contest, best of luck to you always, may your quill never go dry.
Riftkin
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Very creative piece, Good luck in the contest.
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Wonderful write again. I enjoyed this and could almost picture the human as he holds what God gave him struggling in life and looking forward to meeting God.
"they are the sugary picnic
while I prefer to have the illumination
which you obtained"
My favorite lines. Thanks for sharing and best of luck!
~Noor
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I believe all the answers that we will every need are within us we only need to look.
it is through this longing when nothing else seems as important through our determinaion and love we reveal what we have always known.
lovely write displaying the everlasting thirst
exquisite
God bless you my friend...
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Very nice
We are shown the answers, but we must read the words the way they are intended by God and not by man! Seek and you shall find! I find this to be wonderful! The Shaker
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Wow, this is deeply felt, deeply proclaimed...I like it...good luck to you
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I love It!
You did a very wonderful job with the title I gave you and with what they poem is saying. God bless you always and best of luck to you in the contest. Keep up the excellent work.
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