As matches to the wick ignite,
flame sputters, grows and bows in turn;
a solid warms to warp and bend
or, steadfast, may refuse to burn
should gust of air rekindle flame
or take away its life the same.
A contest entry
- Chants, Charms and Notions by Amunet Wolfbane.
750 points, ended November 9, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - THREE DAYS OF CANDLES by Vera Rich.
590 points, ended February 3, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like the feel of this piece a lot. Congrats on the pair of bronze trophies for this, they are well deserved.
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Very well done, poet. This is a very charming poem - it reminds me of Dickenson.
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Worthy of the little brown jug - in fact worthy of a brace of 'em. I love the way you often do this trick - you come up with a rhyme scheme that is somehow minimalist, as though you are hinting at a form; here you have rhymes at lines 2 and 4, and finish off with a rhyming couplet. Couplets give such a definite ending to a poem. This way of writing works so well with your short poems.
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Wow! Its short and yet tells a whole story!
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Yes.
Your flame is burning bright tonight.
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Like how you placed the text of this one in the shadow of the candle. And very timely for St. Martin's Day. But the best part is the dual nature of the wind...Kindling or Snuffing out (Life's) Flame. The wild willful wind.
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This is an excellent little chant here. I can easily see the diversity of it and it flows beautifully. You could easily use this one to build energies and direct them. Nice background to boot. Great presentation.
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I'm having a hard time deciding which I love more: the poem or the background!!! They are both wonderful and when combined as you have done them, I think they are gold. Good luck in the contest dear.
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