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Shiny!!

Shiny!!
Metal glinting
Dancing and cutting
Through the crisp air
So gracefully distracting
Fatally beautiful
Death.

Author notes

Rayni Dayz, a hybrid between option 4 and option 5

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  • kitsmith
    December 1, 2008
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    I GET IT!!! BOFFING!


    • Rayni Dayz
      December 1, 2008
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      Yes! That's actually exactly what I was going for. Of course, you can read into it too, but I wrote with boffing in mind

  • theshadowedone
    November 11, 2008

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    It sounds deep. I don't really get it, but I like the sound of it. It's like short but deep. Cool.


  • Rayni Dayz
    November 8, 2008
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    And now that I know that... *changes necessary fields*

    • kitsmith
      November 9, 2008
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      it's in the rules lol... geez, pay attention. and psst: it's still not in your AN.. now it's just on the comments


  • Rayni Dayz
    November 8, 2008
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    oh ok! Will remember that next time. And thank you for the kind comments, both of you

  • kitsmith
    November 8, 2008

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    nice! Love it. Cute; very cute. Very you.

    This being like your very first poem (or very close to it) ever here on AP, I'm going to give you a warning. Your screen name needs to be in the Author Notes along with the option you chose. K?


  • afullmetalwar
    November 8, 2008
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    …

    cute
    funny
    adorable
    i like it

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