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Shiva

All things beautiful fail
All you create is mine to destroy

The violence of fire and hammer,
my sword's suggestion

A lonely death whisper,
my kiss

All you have loved,
dust through my fingers

All things beautiful fall
into the shadow of my all-ending embrace

Author notes

Picture option 1 - photograph by zemotion http://zemotion.deviantart.com/art/Dark-Angel-69859594

I love zemotion's work. Excellent photo prompt choice.

Not anything stunning on my part, but I promised myself that I would try to start writing more often.

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  • chilali
    November 10, 2008

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    Yes! Yes! Write more often! Haha. After reading this, I can't wait to find you who you are so that I can read more from you. This was a very beautiful write. Ana amzing take on the picture. Great imagery and flow.

    "The violence of fire and hammer,
    my sword's suggestion"

    ^^I really liked that line. Thank you for entering and good luck.


    • suzume
      November 10, 2008
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      Thanks so much. What a high compliment.


  • Canadamomma
    November 8, 2008
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    wonderful write
    good luck in the contest


  • Pure Thought silver member
    November 8, 2008
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    I like this, but don't see anything in this as I do in Drowning in Dreams.

    Buddy


    • suzume
      November 9, 2008
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      Thank you, for both comments. And I understand. This piece isn't as much a personal piece as the other. I'm glad the difference is detectable though, I suppose. And I'm always so happy to get your reactions. ^_^


  • Entwining Beauty
    November 8, 2008

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    Amazingly penned, lingers sadness as I read your words strong emotion. Makes your poem breathtaking good luck in the contest.


  • banrion
    November 8, 2008
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    I love this write. It was perfect for the prompt and a great interpretation of the picture


  • MD Masroor
    November 8, 2008

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    Wow. A beautiful piece here. I loved the imagery and the structure. It somehow gives off a vibrant feeling of dark yet serene emotions. Your promise has been well kept I'd say, because this is proof that you have either been writing a lot to get so far or you're just naturally good. Good luck in the contest!

    • suzume
      November 8, 2008
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      Thank you. That's an incredibly generous comment.


  • 2lullabyhaven
    November 8, 2008

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    I think it is stunning and profoundly impactful lol and good luck in the contest

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