Everyone is singing
A maddening drone.
Hell is coming,
to take us home!
Back to the end.
The only thing I know.
Goodbye old friends.
I don't want to be a disgrace.
A contest entry
- I want your darkest of dark poetry. by Chelse-Oh.
950 points, ended November 21, 2008, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
Comments
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The rhyming is well done, and the syllabul use too, until the last line. But it's a good start. Good luck in the contest! ~Chelsey
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Sounds a little suicidal, such sadness if it is. Dark it most certainly is, for in hell many of us already are, it's called life and one might escape it if they were lucky enough to win lotto or something. Anyway wrong or right, that's my interpretation of your poem. Well written and good luck in contest.
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