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Authority Will Fail

Too many teens have had enough,
anger towards the system keeps bottling up,
soon it will explode and the youth will get revenge,
we will be so angry theres no chance of defense.
Teachers will be forced to learn while the cops are thrown in jail, better fucking run 'cause AUTHORITY WILL FAIL!!!!

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  • BleedingDeep
    November 18, 2008
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    You had me by the title!
    Poetry isn't about making other people happy. Or trying to write a poem that they say it should be like. It doesn't have to flow nor ryme. It just comes from the heart.. no one even has to understand where you come from! I like this piece. I can tell that you'll have many great pomes in the furture for me to read.


  • Andypants
    November 14, 2008

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    It expresses your point very well.
    Very punk.
    Could use some work on the rhythm, however the cool thing about punk is that isn't essential, everyone knows it's all about the attitude.


  • Blooming Poet
    November 8, 2008

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    WELCOME TO ALLPOETRY

    Interesting topic. You may want to add a period at the end of the first line and start the next line as a new sentence. You may want to replace the second use of anger with a similar word. Otherwise I see a great potential.

    Molly


    • TWiTCH-
      November 14, 2008
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      Thanks for welcomeing me

      and thanks for the construcitve criticism, Im kinda new to poetry to thank you very much