He planted seeds
in deceitful soil
cultivated
into blossoming
devotion
Till infidelity
crushed heart's
tender petals
and the thorns
bleed me
Author notes
Prompt: "Roses are not made for love"
- Xandria: Like A Rose On The Grave Of Love
21 words
(dedicated to my ex! lol 
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In a list
A contest entry
- Anyone up for a morning quickie? #3 by chilali.
550 points, ended November 8, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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good write straight up and to the point
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You talents have been missed, I think this is an excellent take on the prompt and you have written a great poem.
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This is a powerfully sad short poem - the nature imagery of the plants and growth interacts well with the title and content
this was a well deserved silver!
Polly
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Ouch! How beautiful deep and creative you always malke me feel the awe in your words and I love it...metaphor and imagery in brevity are amazing...
congrat's on the well deserved trophy...
Love,
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Wow! A personal poem that I am sure many people can relate to. You have put so much emotion in this. You are better off with out him! Congrats on the silver!♥
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Painful
Oh yes deceit dressed in beckoning call of beauty. Excellent poem here. Congratulations on the trophy.
Love Ya
Your Sis
Kelle
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Hey, my clappies didn't show up...here you are!
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OMG! I love this piece! very powerful write ~
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Thanks!
lol.. the clappies are being tempermental at the moment! -
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I know!...they still didn't show up
I will try again
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Thanks for trying hun, but don't worry about it, I'm not all about the clappies
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Im sorry i wonder if its just me? Im sure I will be revisiting this piece anyway and I can give ya the clappies you deserve. but for now these will have to do
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AP has these glitches from time to time. No worries at all hun, I just appreciate the read
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Woe!!! Love it...
So much said in so few words...
Kinda took my breath away in its sincerity, heartfelt honesty & heartbreak in betrayal...
Another fantastic piece...
Well done!!!
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You're soooooooooo talented, my sensuous, beautiful sistergirl.
This poem positively drips with a quiet fury.
A fury I know all too well.
I think we all have been right here, man or woman.
Exes.
UGH.
Who needs em?
I sure don't.
Love ya sistergirl,
jin -
This is just incredible
congratulations
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Thank you!
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Congradulations on the silver, should have been gold, you have really outdone yourself on this poem, I really enjoyed the flow and emotions, great job, blessings with Love John
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Love it! Great images and emotion!!
Congrats on the Silver!!
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Powerfully captures his seed of deceipt and the tragic results of those left in pain. Great take on the prompt
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ooooh wow jackie this is brilliant.
short with a powerful PUNCH!
difinite trphy material, congrats bella
Tasha
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So people are like that, i am glad you put ex there, this is a great poem that is short, but it says it all, keep it flowing and congrads on the sliver.
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I really like the use of the flower and what they portray in relation to the piece, it is juxtaposed, but it works so well.
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I see why this poem won a trophy! This is a fantastic poem, erotica penned with class.
P.
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WOW sis, how beautiful and sad...it is perfect in flow and moments so many of us know...
excellent!
congrat's on the well deserved trophy.
Love,
sis
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This is just so intriguing! Love the word usage to define the imagery here. Very well spoken! You have a wonderful gift of impact, and this one is certainly no exception! Great write!
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that metaphore you used in this is fantastic. Made the imagery truey felt.
You are amazing!
LOVE
Delila
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Sweet silver
Well painted sorrow.
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I understand this one perfectly. Well thought out and very well written.
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I can sure relate to this one! You said so much with so much meaning in such few words. A hard thing to do but done wonderfully!
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Thanks hun
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Your very welcome!
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OMG! The images this short verse brings to mind! You realize this is classical poetry don't you? You have expressed the emotions of two people here one with intentions of lust and the other with total submission. Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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Thanks Sis
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I really like this piece...great metaphor that makes a bigger impact on the reader...congrats on the silver!
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You never cease to amaze...
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You said so much in such few words. 'Piercing' write! Congrats on the silver!
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Excellent metaphor dear..Congrats on the silver!!!
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Yep. Know the feeling. You have a way with words, anyone ever tell you that?
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ouch!!
yeah, a mouthful said in very few words.
insanely well written my friend!
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Oh how sad and happens way too often Love the way you crearted such meaning with htese few lines.
Congratulations on your trophy
Gaylene
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Silver is sexy, per Notorious
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I see you borrowed Cannonsfire's muse while we were out at dinner. lol Seriously, great take on the prompt & congrats on the Silver
Juls
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Well done on the silver SIL, yes such cruel intentions, well written here. C
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Bittersweet
Excellent write, as usual...I warned you about those thorny flowers.
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another gold. truly.
I love this heavy, heavy write.
Much love, and I wish you the best.
jin
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I loved this!! Completely! I love the imagery and the way you've described everything. "deceitful soil". Wow! hehe. I love the title as well! Thank you so much for your great entry and good luck
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What a lovely dedication poem you have here...it bleeds bitter.
"deceitful soil"<==Muahahahaha, this makes me grin hugely; it's awesome. It makes me think of a foundation (the soil) being well...deceitful.
'infidelity'<==
I love this word, oddly enough...it's quite cool for a word with terrible meaning.
"bleed me"<=="bleed self" maybe? 'me' sounded casual with the rest of it (not that this poem is formal, but yeah).
You should place dude
Jessica
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You've baked the cake and iced it too, hahaha a good take, I think lol and good luck in the contest
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Your muse returned! This is awesome sweets, an excellent take on the prompt. Meh, men always have to screw things up hey! 
Good luck in the contest but you shouldn't need it with this!
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Amazing! omg! The contestants here are just good! I love the meaning embedded deep within the poem, and how it tells a story with such ease yet leaves the mind open to decipher one's own image. Beautifully penned! Good luck!
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Wow, this was brilliant!
There was imagery and everything in this piece.
It was perfect.
Good luck in the contest. =]
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Brilliant, superb, marvellous Gosh you are too good for me fine poet. You did this perfectly. You'll be wearing a shiny by the end of this. Best to you in the contest
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