if I could choose
the choices I want
I would live
where I am not
I would love the
love that I feel
and share it with the one
for which it is real
instead I live with
the choices I chose
I live where I live
where my love never grows
if I could choose
the choices I wish
the lives I could change
the happiness I could give
the ones I could help
the good I would do
if what I know now
was what then I knew
instead I live with
the choices I made
so all I can do is
live day by day
Author notes
This is the first poem I have ever written. I want to learn, so I would appreciate any thoughts.
Written February 1st, 2004
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a first ever?
very impressive if you aske me
you didnt stress it at all, you've got some great flow and your stanzas (verses) are really well set out
its also got a great lil trail of thoughts im sure more than many of us know the feeling of -
good poem
has alot of thought and meaning too it ur first poem ever 
or just on this site? if its ur first ever *hand five* lol this was really good, my first 30poems sucked!! it took me forever to get at least this good and i still think my poems suck but anyways ur good at wat you d
so good job and keep writing!
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I thought this was good and see by your comments it's your first poem so I am impressed.
You express yourself well - I will look out for more.
Bec
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This poem is so true...sometimes I think everything happens by choice...but every line in this poem made me think twice about it, it takes a lot for a poem to change my mind that way...great job
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I thought this was good too – excellent for a first poem! Not a new idea but very well worked into words – good start, I’ll be watching for more…
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