The cliché always reads
“A penny for your thoughts”
and with $3.65,
I could buy a year’s worth
of your wisdom.
But were I sufficiently frugal
to put away
a shiny new copper piece
under my pillow for the next
three hundred and sixty five days,
I would have no need
to buy your brilliance
as it was always free,
wrapped in the cotton safety
of your love and laying
next to me.
Author notes
X.X.X.
I love being first in line.
The title is a nod to the Beatles. Thank you, kind sirs, for your own brand of brilliance.
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A contest entry
- $3.65 by Loki.
700 points, ended November 14, 2008, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I love that someone thought to do a penny for your thoughts, That is such a classic cliche but you've put a new twist on it here, congratulations and thank you for entering. Enjoy your trophy.
X.X.X.
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surely it is penny lane.as the beatles didnt do penny laneS
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Actually, no the "s" on the end of my title was quite intentional as it was intended for multiple meanings. The author's note is plain in stating that my title is a simple NOD to the Beatles, not a direct quote. Evidently, you have misinterpreted not only my poem but the comment I left on yours as I see that you have removed it from the contest.
Sad, I thought it was a good entry but apparently you are unwilling to receive unbiased commentary so my humblest apologies are offered.
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I love this, and I love the coziness of the ending lines, it brought me comfort and a smile. Great write, good luck.
♥
whisper
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Some entry-it rocks...good luck in the contest lol and congrats on capturing the frontline glory hahaha I guess I'm 'second fiddle' again..
lol
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