How I'd love to think
that after your fingers
glimmered
at my waist again,
you left to drink
me away.
Too bad
that underneath
your fingertips, my skin
was stained with kisses
from an hour before.
A contest entry
- Best Prewrites From November 2008 by amaranthine lover.
700 points, ended December 28, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - the catharsis rounds; auditions. by aanika.
1800 points, ended February 10, 43 entries
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Any comments are appreciated.
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nice take
I liked this poem it was short but poignant I like poetry like this It challenges me to keep re-reading and get what its trying to say. thank you for entering good luck
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this is a great write
thanks for entering
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Good luck -
yes.
thanks for entering. -
yes.
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Woah!
short. sweet. to the point. BIG Finish! Amazing job!
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This is my personal comment for the catharsis rounds.
Upon the closing of the contest, I will comment back with a 'yes' or 'no.'
That being said,
Aanika took the words out of my mouth.
I generally hate short poems, but I really loved this one.
I would love to see you write something of greater length.
Thanks for entering, I'll be back. =]
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I usually hate short poems,
but I actually liked this a lot.
the impact was amazing, as well as the emotion and I'd love to see what you could do with a prompt/longer line limit.
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I love the sensuality, calm and beauty of your writing here
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awww this is precious!
i absolutley love this.
even though its short, passion still flows through it.
i really loved it.
your Faerie
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This is a seriously good write, the simplicity of it is seductive, it is very well crafted, the last verse is spectacular, thanks for sharing this little gem,
littlefishone
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