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A Mere Ember's Glow

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My son,
  be ye not a coward,
  for thou art
  a Child of Light ~
  against thee
  no darkness,
  nay,
  not even thine own
  secret sins
  wilt bare thee
  false witness.

Whilst thy heart
  may feel as though
  in shadow,
  fear ye not ~
  a mere ember's glow
  in thy soul
  shalt deliver thee
  unharmed
  if thou dost keep

  thy faith alive.
 

 

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15. Stand Tall Against Your Own Shadow
60 Words

Xianaria

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  • Salty Hibiscus gold member
    February 1

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    i like the old english words you used in this gorgeous poem. fiery well done. thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.


  • aboomer silver member
    January 17

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    I really LOVE the wording in this!
    Gave me such a feeling of peace when I read this.
    blessings
    jan


  • Denerica
    January 17
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    Worthy of the silver...nice write.


  • aboomer silver member
    November 9, 2008
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    Beautiful!!
    congrats on the Silver!


  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 8, 2008

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    Excellence in this write! Your old English words, with the deep spiritual mood enhances the message powerfully...Congratulations on the silver!


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    November 8, 2008
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    Congratulations on winning silver!


  • Stingersinger53 gold member
    November 8, 2008
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    Congrats to you also on the silver. I saw your poem before and didn't think I had a chance. Your words are just so beautiful, and the thoughts on the quote are perfect. I ALMOST picked that quote, until I saw your poem, LOL. Congrats again for a wonderfully written poem and I'll see you in the next round!

    Hugs!!!
    Cayla

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    November 8, 2008
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    Congratulations


  • Arkbear gold member
    November 8, 2008
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    Counting *its* as two words....Grrr ~


    • Xianaria gold member
      November 8, 2008
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      It counted a posessive noun as two words? Hmmm I wonder what its problem is Humans can still count better than machines, go figure


  • Arkbear gold member
    November 8, 2008
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    Recount.....60 words exactly

  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    November 8, 2008

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    Great take on the prompt. Great advice for those of us who find our shadow overwhelming at times. A true message of hope.

  • Arkbear gold member
    November 8, 2008

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    Hello

     

    Absolutely lovey vision from your Prompt....wow ~

     

    I do get 61 words though.>>>  http://javascript.internet.com/forms/word-count.html

     

    No biggie....just a tad deduction there

     

    It has been a long time in between since I have read such a beautiful poetic voice.......most people are not in to using *thees & thous*, but if done properly and wisely, they can created a majestic Tone which has superb appeal.....nice job ~

     

    I have nothing to critique here....each S* rocked....bravo....good luck & God bless you,

     

     

    Bear ~

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    November 8, 2008

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    Oh I like this I was going to use this prompt and then changed my mind you did a great job here good luck to you in the contest be well

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