moments pass between,
as your string of lies whell up.
my mind has become blank,
and you don't have the decency to tell me-
"what is really going on?"
we dance around each other with words,
your own biting at me.
why don't you
tell the truth.
their words plague my dreams,
and my blood boils
as we seper
ate.
this eats me from within,
i tense
hearing
unseen whispers between past
and present
you take them into your heart
as you press mine against the cement.
you cut in front,
eager to prove your point.
i lose patience,
you don’t have time to listen-
“you’re wrong.”
my mistakes feed your imagination
it’s not as bad as you seem to believe-
but we dis
connect
i’m the one at fault.
your blood hits the carpet
as i finally give up
explaining.
A contest entry
- Frustration by Polaja.
1200 points, ended November 13, 2008, 40 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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I really like the disconnected words in this poem - and the formatting is excellently done to emphasise the way you are thinking and the frustration that you feel
I would have liked some more imagery and metaphor - but as this is it is intriguing 
Thank you for entering
Polly

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Very frustrating. Well written.
"as we seper
ate.
this eats me from within,"
I love the word play there.


