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an unwanted conversation

moments pass between,
              as your string of lies whell up.
my mind has become blank,
                              and you don't have the decency to tell me-

"what is really going on?"

we dance around each other with words,
                your own biting at me.
                                why don't you
tell the truth.
                their words plague my dreams,
                                      and my blood boils
as we seper
                      ate.
            this eats me from within,
                                              i tense
                          hearing
unseen whispers between past
                        and present
                                          you take them into your heart
                                                                as you press mine against the cement.






you cut in front,
      eager to prove your point.
i lose patience,
                      you don’t have time to listen-
                                                  “you’re wrong.”
my mistakes feed your imagination
                    it’s not as bad as you seem to believe-
but we dis
                    connect
                i’m the one at fault.
                              your blood hits the carpet
as i finally give up
              explaining.

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  • Polaja Greeters member
    November 13, 2008

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    I really like the disconnected words in this poem - and the formatting is excellently done to emphasise the way you are thinking and the frustration that you feel I would have liked some more imagery and metaphor - but as this is it is intriguing

    Thank you for entering

    Polly


  • facelessxfacade
    November 7, 2008

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    Very frustrating. Well written.

    "as we seper
    ate.
    this eats me from within,"

    I love the word play there.