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Makers of Pearl

Today’s debris embeds inside,
temptation’s shards or gritty pride;
acerbic galls formed ‘round such pain
beget woe’s scars or nobler gain.

Through will determined, purpose fixed,
volition’s voice soothes barb-ed pricks;
compassion’s lustrous nacre balm
enfolds bright rage in layered calm.

When Death unveils what flesh conceals,
each spirit’s nature, self reveals;
whose touch sets lacquer trace on Gate
avows “This heart has conquered hate.”

Diane L. Busch




Author notes

nacre (NEY-ker): mother-of-pearl
Prompt #20, 60 words

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  • aboomer silver member
    November 11, 2008

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    lovely wording! I really love your first line on this!
    'Today’s debris embeds inside'

    Also love,

    'Death unveils what flesh conceals,
    spirit’s nature, self reveals;'

    nice job!
    Congrats on the trophy!


  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 8, 2008

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    Your choice of vocabulary, your choice of prompt, has me loving this write...The lesson of the oyster....midst all it goes through can bring forth a pearl....which you so aptly have shown with your imagery to be so...a pearl of a write!


  • Arkbear gold member
    November 8, 2008

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    Hello

     

    Oh my gosh......you may not get into the Fianls with so many words over the Word MAX limit for this Round

     

    http://javascript.internet.com/forms/word-count.html

     

    I get 66 words

     

    However, I get 63, if, I fix....*festering....suffering....barbed*

     

    Still 3 words over.....but......this shall score pretty well, but.....maybe, an HM, but I am not in control over the next few entries, and how good they may be either.....so, we just have to wait and see....fair enough?

     

    I score it at 97.7.....I hope you understand......and BTW....yes, a lovely write with such a gorgeous Tone penned throughout.....I hope it makes the top 6 spots.....I adore your talent.....let's hope it holds on to that place of scoring.....good luck and God bless you,

     

     

    Bear ~


    • Mirthryl
      November 8, 2008
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      Might I ask that you please post the link to the counter you will be using with the contest info, if you opt to use a word-count format for the next round?

      all best,
      Mirthryl


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    November 8, 2008

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    Perfection! Those "pearly gates" take on a whole other layer of meaning in your poem. Instead of meaning "opulence" they become a gift of self from us to our God. Beautiful!

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