Broken pathways
lead to broken futures
broken homes
along broken rocks
Broken walls
lead to broken hearts
broken trust
Along broken dolls
Broken traditions
lead to broken families
broken power
along broken confessions
Broken words
lead to broken miscommunications
broken leaders
along broken herds
Broken feelings
lead to broken friendships
broken secrets
along broken concealings
Author notes
I chose prompt numero uno[ONE]: "Broken Sidewalks" i hope you enjoyed it cause i absolutely LOVED getting this experience first hand just MARVELOUS![Sarcasm]
A contest entry
- PROMPTS VIII - Round 1 of 2 - by Bear - by Arkbear.
400 points, ended November 8, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what you think
Comments
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Deep thought, words, wisdom here.Maybe a little too much of the word broken...thought provoking
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Hello
Not sure what your AN's meant...Hmmm ~
Ok....as for your write....lovely take on your chosen Prompt ~
I get 55 words....should be 60..>> http://javascript.internet.com/forms/word-count.html
Small deduction there ~
Your 2nd S* is the only which I could not relate....doesn't mean other Readers will not be able to, but I could not ~
I enjoyed your ability to reach for those things which mean so much to many of us.....repeating the word *broken* is a tad....awkward, as it does not lead up to more Power in your write, yet, it tends to flow....Huuuuuuuummmmmmmm....instead of ....oOOOOooooOOOOOoooOOOOOooooo.....do you see the difference in Tone?
Over-all, a nice entry with lots to ponder....good luck and God bless you,
Bear ~
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I love you Desi
and Jon is an ASSHOLE
forget him
great poem
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this is really pretty. the flow went really well
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