Fingers entwined, but no sparks
were exchanged between us.
You search the shadows
for his cold touch,
only to become lost in thought.
My eyes take in the crowd;
blurred figures pass by.
I squeeze your familiar hand.
[We are alone, together.]
Author notes
4.) "Solitude doesn't have to be alone."
Curious LiLi
A contest entry
- Prompts; by Hell In Harmony.
2200 points, ended November 18, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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cute, i like the ending
wish ther was more to this though <3
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A very insightful write for one so "annually challenged"
You've captured a bit of life's truth in you well woven net of words... Excellent write and best of luck.
K
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exellant!
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coool
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"We're alone together". What a safe coincidence. I have someone that I feel that way about and it is the safest and happiest I have ever been. Alone with another person that fits against my eccentricities like a key to a lock. This is a lovely piece.
Best of luck in the contest! -
Your imagery here is amazing. I love your wording too. It's so comfortingly lonely. [i know, that makes no sense]
'You search the shadows
for his cold touch,
only to become lost in thought.'
I love all of it, but these lines stood out. I can sort of relate...:]
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Beautiful
It's amazing!
'We're alone together'
That's my favorite part!
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wow. im almost perfectly speechless.
whether this is made of or not, ive been there.
Fingers entwined, but no sparks
were exchanged between us.
[We are alone, together.]
nicely done.
-andi
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