The bars that hold the light
and darkness sleep wean
never to smell affection aroma
rip up the letters that candle in untill
these chaotic palms that nest of soma
What has happened to me,still?
Hear my needs for clamor,will.
A contest entry
- Prompt Contest 15 entries 40 words or less #32 by mysticstorm.
650 points, ended November 8, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I must be insane. PREWRITES! by borrowing.moonlight.
720 points, ended July 30, 83 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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it was a bit short for my tastes. i believe if you were trying to write a story you should have made it a little more expansive. however it was good. thank you for the entry
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Thank you
Thank you for the comment given to my poem. I do have another poem. Kendhal22
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this is a great entry
i can see i have some one to worry bout
good luck in the contest
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Thank you
Thank you for the wonderful comment given to my poem. You do well all on your on. Big fan of your writing. Kendhal22
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i have to agree with mysticstorm, this is soft and sorrowful, and at the same time calm.
i like the background that you chose, it fits the piece nicely.
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thank you
Thank you for the wonderful comment given to my poem. I had to change the background twice, because the dark background was too dark. I hope this fit the contest rules. Kendhal22
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Lovely flow and word choice...soft and sorrowful...nicely creative,,,
thank you for entering.
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Thank you for the wonderful comment given. Kendhal22
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