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You and me

Till the end of time
It shall be me and you
As long as there is Heaven and Hell
We'll be stuck together like glue

I want to tell you so much
But I dont know how
My body won't let me but
I will continue to try thats my God honest vow

When I look into your eyes
I know my heart wouldn't lie to me
About the way my love for you is true,
And for that love of you anything I would do

So you and me
Together we will stay
For nothing in this world
Could pull me away!

Author notes

eh i tried?? another quickie just trin to kill time seeing as how we didnt have to dress out in PE today because we have a stupid Pep Rally later BLECK!

~*Princess Cuddle Bug*~

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Comments

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  • Tiffany Turner
    January 13, 2009

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    this is a very simple poem...i like it a lot...thank you for entering my contest...good luck...and keep up the good work...


  • Truthful Sinner
    December 17, 2008

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    I really like this poem proally cause all the emotion that is in it, great write,
    keep up the good work


  • aestival infinity
    December 11, 2008

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    simple, and I like the emotions in this. It seems a bit forced as far as rhyme goes, but that's the way a lot of rhyme seems to me, so please don't take it too personally. Thanks for entering though and best wishes.


  • feetus
    November 7, 2008

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    I likie.
    It was short & sweet & warm.
    I honestly admire your optimistic appraisal
    of life! It's easy to linger in the dark..
    yet you seem to have no trouble being a ray of light.
    Well done & g'luck in the contest.
    (you mispelled "body" in stanza 2, line 3.)


    • Princess Cuddle Bug
      November 7, 2008
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      im glade you likie love and its a new thing that im just running away with right now! lol the whole optimistic thing.... you should read some of my really old stuff.... tis pretty dark.... but i dont think i added any of those on here though (theres a reason for that) thankz for the read!

      thankz for spellig mistake hun i hadnt reread it yet,
      ~*Princess Cuddle Bug*~

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