To be apart for centuries
Knowing that you would never see each other
The blood that seals the kiss
I once had
To overcome the pain will take
many more centuries
To cause so much pain on others
To substitute feelings
Inflicting Pain on To others
My love for you will never go away
You have my soul
Made me your one
Until we have a chance
To see the sun together
And Depart
Author notes
Options 4 the vampires
First time writing a vampire poem.
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A contest entry
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1750 points, ended November 20, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
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If i stink don't be afraid to tell me.
Comments
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this deserves to win some gold, it was amazing, and a great vampire write also.
Take care.
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This is an amazing poem. It has such great imagry. Great poem! Keep up with the wonderful writes.
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A lovely read ! Just goes to show , even
vampires can fall in loooove !
Beautifully executed - congratulations !!
Best wishes !! Friend Easy
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I love this write. It is so heartfelt and emotional. Well Done
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Ahhh, I didn't see this being a vampire poem until I read the last couple of lines, up to then, I was picturing a couple who have been separated by the waves of time and cannot find one another to get back together once more!
However, I was a little confused as to whether you were talking from the mind of someone who is in love with another vampire that they will not see any century soon OR about vampires in general - the line;
"Knowing that you would never see each other"
sounds as though it's one vampire talking about another two vampires who are in love.
However, then you say,
"My love for you will never go away"
which makes it sound like the narrator is one of the two [i]in[/i] love - that was the only part I had a question mark over.
Nice job; thanks for entering
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Good job. Good luck! Thanks for entering!
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great take on the prompt
but remember
"Vampires are make-believe, like elves, gremlins, and eskimos."
Matt Groening (1954 - ), The Simpsons
lol
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its okay it could be improved well done
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This was amazing and so beautiful!!!! I am a vampire fan and a twilight freak!
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this is some awesome dark poetry I like it =] keep up the good work
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"Shows the softer side of vampires" I would like to echo this statement simply for the sheer fact that that is what the Cullens, the main vampires in the Twilight series essentially are the embodiment of, the softer side of vampires, and I like how this, whether intentionally or unintenionally tied in the with the series in more ways then one. I can see how this could fit with either love or vampires for themes, and I did enjoy reading this poem.
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This is good
This is good, I saw the vampire theme clearly.
Shows the softer side of vampires
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Great vampire love poem. I like the broken form too, it echoes the broken heart of the lover. The ending was the best part though, almost like they had disappeared back into the night! Super!
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Kinda Dark?
Serious poetry! I like it though! Good luck in the contest!
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Not really.
You do not stink believe me, this is an different approach to the subject matter and I can vouch for its validity. -
Until we have a chance
To see the sun together
And Depart, i loved these last lines i thought they were full of emotion and you captured certain feeling of love perfectly
a great poem
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